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3/20/2010 c1 Irrevocable Memory
Err ..what I said about pointing out each mistake? Scratch that :))

/So let me just give an over-all? :D

"Can you tell me what class and what is his name"

This phrase seems to me very un-Natsume-like. Natsume + Requesting is not a balanced equation. Commanding is more like him, really.

And that last line, too. Really unlike him to be that dense, haha.

Also, you need to work on the punctuation and grammar here. You use a lot of ellipsis, too, which kinda bothers me :))

Other than that, it's okay :D
9/19/2009 c3 OhmyBatman
sequel! sequel! will be fun please... oh pretty please...
5/13/2009 c2 1nissikisses
what's with the toyohashi girl?

i don't like her.
5/13/2009 c1 nissikisses
hahaha.. natsume is soo dense!

mikan is soo obvious..

how kawaii!
5/8/2009 c3 purplernb
wow! i like this story...

love it...

Thank you!
8/24/2008 c1 4ChiyakoChan
lol the ending of Ch 1 is so cute! I can't wait to read more! *I shall tomorrow*

Natsume dense is so interesting haha
6/30/2008 c3 jaoce
OMG! I SOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSO... want a sequel! Pretty please, with a Howalon on top! It was so cute and gud and ILUVDIT! Arigato ne!
6/3/2008 c3 Brown-Eyed Brunnete
sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!

sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!

sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!

sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!

sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!

sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!

sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!

sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!

sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!sequel!

pretty please?with sugar on top? maybe even a little whipped cream?

or possibly a few cherries? or some chocolate sauce?
5/26/2008 c3 1IAmTheBattleMaiden
Congrats on finishing your mini-series. Good luck in the future! ^_^

Ja-ne! ^_-
5/26/2008 c3 kristinemelody
I love it!

So sweet!

And funny too!

- KMAC
5/25/2008 c3 6tsubasa22
oh god...I would love a sequel..that was so cute...kawaii
5/17/2008 c2 1eternalsnow2wish
Good! very good! ah you can call me snowie-chan, i really don't mind

haha but i almost forgot you, i haven't been on f.f in a while.

Oh well, I've returned and i promise to continue my stories!
2/29/2008 c1 1tina1061
I think he really is an idiot too huh
2/10/2008 c2 15The Hopeless Wanderlust
Nice! Cute! cute!

gosh, happy belated birthday!

no wonder i have not heard from you for so long.

glad that you have finally back online^^

welcome back, buddy! i missed you!^^

update soon! this is a good, cute chapter you've written here!

-sarah
2/10/2008 c2 6tsubasa22
aww...Natsume is so...affectional.(couldn't the right word)

any ways, NATSUME IS SO CUTE IN THIS CHAPTER!
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