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12/5/2009 c1 m0echangalzz
gosh!

it's too damn short...

i think it can be much longer than this.
11/23/2007 c1 Scribbles 'n' Words
This is pretty good for your second fic! I like the idea behind it; it's really the only way the pairing makes sense as they really don't have hearts, after all.

Okay, this is completely constructive critisism because I'm a new author, as well, and I really hate it when I ask for help and no one gives it, so please don't take offense to any of this. It seemed a little bit rushed. I suppose the story itself doesn't really need to be longer, but the sentences were short and undescriptive. It took away from the flow of the story and made it feel a bit choppy. Other than that, you did an amazing job! I look forward to reading future fics from you and seeing you grow as an author.
11/23/2007 c1 7SorasKey
oh! this would be great if you took it out of it's oneshot-ness and put in another chapter or a sequel oneshot. it's really good.

~SorasKey
11/22/2007 c1 11lemonadeskies
I love this!

It was so short and simple, I loved it. :)

Funny, I wrote a FanFic about RxN and it was called Strawberry Kisses.

xD

It was my first one. Maybe you could check it out? kthxbai.

;D
11/22/2007 c1 11Lebrezie
This is good. some might say that it needs some more description but i think it flowed fine with what it had.

i like the plot, very good one shot material.

very good. create another i am going to check your other story out now, if it is Kh of course.

very nice job, i love Namine and Roxas very much. bye :)
11/22/2007 c1 lazy.afternooner
aww love love loved it ^-^

namine n roxas r so cute.

shame bout the whole no hearts business tho. T-T

anyhoo still loved the story
11/22/2007 c1 6xxxNam-niCxxx
I like this, you should make it into a story. I think it would be a good story if you do that. But its good anyways, ^_^.
11/22/2007 c1 E Muja SN and TN
I think that was ober cute and i hope you add more to it! please cause it was really good!

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