for NarutoxBleach FAILURE2/21/2008 c7 KatanaKage
I like your story except for one thing that you did and a lot of authors do in a bleach naruto cross... Turn naruto into a vaizard... I really don't care for that, and its been done so many times... There's like two bleach crossovers that don't have an inner hollow and then a hundred that do... and since kyubi is still in naruto couldn't he have killed it already? Another thing was Naruto didn't start absorbing spirit particles until just now... So how could he have absorbed some of that hollow? I don't know I just wish he wasn't a vaizard
I like your story except for one thing that you did and a lot of authors do in a bleach naruto cross... Turn naruto into a vaizard... I really don't care for that, and its been done so many times... There's like two bleach crossovers that don't have an inner hollow and then a hundred that do... and since kyubi is still in naruto couldn't he have killed it already? Another thing was Naruto didn't start absorbing spirit particles until just now... So how could he have absorbed some of that hollow? I don't know I just wish he wasn't a vaizard
2/21/2008 c7 Akalon
I'd like to see a mentor/friend relationship between Naruto and Karin & Yuzu and Ururu.
As for a girlfriend well other then Yoruichi I don't really know each and everyone of the females names just the ones around Ichigo. But I'd like to see more of the sexual tension between Naruto and Yoruichi, 'cause most of the other girls just seem to come across as too young for him.
I'd like to see a mentor/friend relationship between Naruto and Karin & Yuzu and Ururu.
As for a girlfriend well other then Yoruichi I don't really know each and everyone of the females names just the ones around Ichigo. But I'd like to see more of the sexual tension between Naruto and Yoruichi, 'cause most of the other girls just seem to come across as too young for him.
2/21/2008 c6 espo
Good story so far. Quick question about the 50/50 physical/spiritual energy. Why stop at 50/50? Like you said, "It takes a certain amount of spiritual power to be affective but the smallest amount of Ki will allow contact with the living." So why stop at 50/50 if, say 20/80 physical/spiritual will still allow him to interact with the living but also have a much easier time with spiritual beings?
Good story so far. Quick question about the 50/50 physical/spiritual energy. Why stop at 50/50? Like you said, "It takes a certain amount of spiritual power to be affective but the smallest amount of Ki will allow contact with the living." So why stop at 50/50 if, say 20/80 physical/spiritual will still allow him to interact with the living but also have a much easier time with spiritual beings?
2/21/2008 c6 Ryan
I like this story. i was scared for a minute because i thought you stopped writing. i was wondering what narutos shikai would look like in his human form though. i hope you update soon.
I like this story. i was scared for a minute because i thought you stopped writing. i was wondering what narutos shikai would look like in his human form though. i hope you update soon.
2/21/2008 c6 EroKitsune1234
good story try and focus on hollow and demon power together as they are basically the same and then shinigami however you are taking a bit long to make naruto release his zanpakuto so if you can plz get that done quickly anyways great story update soon
good story try and focus on hollow and demon power together as they are basically the same and then shinigami however you are taking a bit long to make naruto release his zanpakuto so if you can plz get that done quickly anyways great story update soon
2/21/2008 c6 
1Metacarius
Hot damn! An offer for a tar and feathering! But as much as you tempt me, if I do that, you won't be able to write any more.
Still working the story really well. I like the way you're putting things together and how it seems to be well thought out. Not sure I quite understand the spiritual power thing. He shouldn't be that under powered, even with 20%. The rasengan has really always been an overkill move. You could think of it as a 10lb wrecking ball. At 20%, a 200lb wrecking ball, though not as catastrophic as it's big brother, still hurts a hell of a lot. If that's the crunch he's hitting with... he might be a bit under powered right now. Especially since any tails, much less multiple ones, represent a power on an unfathomable level to human kind. But at the same time you have a power limiter there... I don't know... something in the relationship between his current and actual power seems wonkey right now when I talk through it.
Otherwise, The story's going really well. The setting is great and you're blending Bleach and Naruto very well. Keep up the great work!
For your powers question? You already seem to have it figured out. He's going to start training his spirit power first, which would naturally lead to training any shinigami powers he might obtain. The demon powers seem to be coming on their own, at their own rate. And really, he's working on 'other' right now, since he doesn't have anything else to do.
Once again. Good job on the chapter!
1MetacariusHot damn! An offer for a tar and feathering! But as much as you tempt me, if I do that, you won't be able to write any more.
Still working the story really well. I like the way you're putting things together and how it seems to be well thought out. Not sure I quite understand the spiritual power thing. He shouldn't be that under powered, even with 20%. The rasengan has really always been an overkill move. You could think of it as a 10lb wrecking ball. At 20%, a 200lb wrecking ball, though not as catastrophic as it's big brother, still hurts a hell of a lot. If that's the crunch he's hitting with... he might be a bit under powered right now. Especially since any tails, much less multiple ones, represent a power on an unfathomable level to human kind. But at the same time you have a power limiter there... I don't know... something in the relationship between his current and actual power seems wonkey right now when I talk through it.
Otherwise, The story's going really well. The setting is great and you're blending Bleach and Naruto very well. Keep up the great work!
For your powers question? You already seem to have it figured out. He's going to start training his spirit power first, which would naturally lead to training any shinigami powers he might obtain. The demon powers seem to be coming on their own, at their own rate. And really, he's working on 'other' right now, since he doesn't have anything else to do.
Once again. Good job on the chapter!
2/20/2008 c6 3refused
Focus on Shinigami powers imho.
It's easier, and won't get him in that helluva lot of trouble later on ;P
Great chapter,
Cheers.
3refusedFocus on Shinigami powers imho.
It's easier, and won't get him in that helluva lot of trouble later on ;P
Great chapter,
Cheers.
2/20/2008 c6 Seerss
Great chapter. I think that you should focus on demon powers because I'd really like to see what powers you'll give him. Update soon!
Great chapter. I think that you should focus on demon powers because I'd really like to see what powers you'll give him. Update soon!
2/20/2008 c6 2Gin of the wicked smile
great story, please let him get orihime and Yoruichi and more !
2Gin of the wicked smilegreat story, please let him get orihime and Yoruichi and more !
2/20/2008 c6 4the DragonBard
There's a few minor mistakes. When you first start talking about Menos Grande, you call them Gillians. The rest of the time, you use the term correctly. Next, you say the Adjucas are human sized, which is incorrect. During a flashback, we see Adjucas who are the same size as Gillians.
One problem I see is, how can Hollows have body energy, when they're pure spirit?
There's something I've got to point out. Deidre and Tobi/Madara 'together' beat the Sanbi, and were exhauted doing it. They also said that the only reason they were able to do it, is that it was a dumb animal. Had they been fighting an intelligent Bijuu, they would have been toast. Heck, Deidre almost got beat by Gaara, who's only a Jinchuriki, not a Bijuu. Would have been beatten if Gaara hadn't protected the village.
I'd say that, in terms of raw power, Naruto's the equal of a powerful Adjucas 'at minimum.' More likely, he's the equal of a Vastos Lorde. Remember, a single Bijuu has enough power to destroy a city easily.
BTW: How's Demonic Nemesis coming?
4the DragonBardThere's a few minor mistakes. When you first start talking about Menos Grande, you call them Gillians. The rest of the time, you use the term correctly. Next, you say the Adjucas are human sized, which is incorrect. During a flashback, we see Adjucas who are the same size as Gillians.
One problem I see is, how can Hollows have body energy, when they're pure spirit?
There's something I've got to point out. Deidre and Tobi/Madara 'together' beat the Sanbi, and were exhauted doing it. They also said that the only reason they were able to do it, is that it was a dumb animal. Had they been fighting an intelligent Bijuu, they would have been toast. Heck, Deidre almost got beat by Gaara, who's only a Jinchuriki, not a Bijuu. Would have been beatten if Gaara hadn't protected the village.
I'd say that, in terms of raw power, Naruto's the equal of a powerful Adjucas 'at minimum.' More likely, he's the equal of a Vastos Lorde. Remember, a single Bijuu has enough power to destroy a city easily.
BTW: How's Demonic Nemesis coming?
2/20/2008 c6 crazyfoxdemon
Why would I want to Tar and Feather you? It was a great chapter. I think you should focus on Naruto's shinigami powers at the moment, followed by his demon powers. I think you should leave the other stuff alone right now. At least until after the rescue ark. Will Naruto be paired with anyone and if so Who? I hope you update soon. :)
Why would I want to Tar and Feather you? It was a great chapter. I think you should focus on Naruto's shinigami powers at the moment, followed by his demon powers. I think you should leave the other stuff alone right now. At least until after the rescue ark. Will Naruto be paired with anyone and if so Who? I hope you update soon. :)
2/20/2008 c6 Dark omega z
awsome...when will ichigo's group learn of naruto's past and what he is? ...XD
awsome...when will ichigo's group learn of naruto's past and what he is? ...XD