for Relentless12/5/2008 c3 JVSOCCEROHOHFresh
the song is prelude 12/21 not miss murder
the song is prelude 12/21 not miss murder
3/23/2008 c1 
8LostInTheLibrary
I really loved your story! it was a little confusing in places but i think i got it in the end. I thought it was a really interesting idea and the plot was good. I also liked your writing style ^_^
8LostInTheLibraryI really loved your story! it was a little confusing in places but i think i got it in the end. I thought it was a really interesting idea and the plot was good. I also liked your writing style ^_^
1/28/2008 c9 4BellaCinderella
so you decided to continue this story instead? alrighttyy
if you do ever want to write the other story, just tell me, i have bunches of time now,
good luck with this one!
4BellaCinderellaso you decided to continue this story instead? alrighttyy
if you do ever want to write the other story, just tell me, i have bunches of time now,
good luck with this one!
1/19/2008 c9 39Troublesome Dragon
B A few sentences confused me as to her reasoning and feelings behind it. Sometimes your writing is not coherent although the plot is good the confusion killed the story a little. I kept reading because I was bored not because the story hooked me. Is there going to be more or is this the end? A bit anticlimatic if it is, nothing's changed. It makes it sound like she only wants Edward as a vampire rejecting any other version. Especially when he says, "It comes down to that doesn't it?" I think she would have jumped at the chance to stay with Edward. The phrase there's nothing she wouldn't do comes to mind or is she hoping her Edward will come back? Well, this is my honest opinion.
39Troublesome DragonB A few sentences confused me as to her reasoning and feelings behind it. Sometimes your writing is not coherent although the plot is good the confusion killed the story a little. I kept reading because I was bored not because the story hooked me. Is there going to be more or is this the end? A bit anticlimatic if it is, nothing's changed. It makes it sound like she only wants Edward as a vampire rejecting any other version. Especially when he says, "It comes down to that doesn't it?" I think she would have jumped at the chance to stay with Edward. The phrase there's nothing she wouldn't do comes to mind or is she hoping her Edward will come back? Well, this is my honest opinion.
1/15/2008 c9 abbyinwonderland93
i hate it: you left us on a mojor cliifhanger!
ehh its okay: for someone that has no idea whats going on. [i do by the way]
WANT MORE!:whats goign to happen next?
in the end...i loved it. no one could have written it better!
i hate it: you left us on a mojor cliifhanger!
ehh its okay: for someone that has no idea whats going on. [i do by the way]
WANT MORE!:whats goign to happen next?
in the end...i loved it. no one could have written it better!
1/1/2008 c8 Summer Home In Reality
NO! Not a cliffhanger! Great update, though. I really enjoyed it, and I think your doing a great job! :-)
NO! Not a cliffhanger! Great update, though. I really enjoyed it, and I think your doing a great job! :-)
12/31/2007 c8 cullen2b
Well, i probably sound like an idiot, but i'm still totally confused with the whole Elizabeth thing. Sorry. I still like your story though!
Well, i probably sound like an idiot, but i'm still totally confused with the whole Elizabeth thing. Sorry. I still like your story though!
12/30/2007 c7 BellaCinderella
Ok Whose Elizabeth Mary? There are two elizabeths? One is Edward Mother, now whose the second? Thats been confusing me to no end.
And also Edward mother can read minds? What is she, and why can she do that?
And one last thing Just to help you out abit, the characters have been Somewhat Ooc. Carlisle is usually more loving, and caring towards his patients. Edward is more shy, and conservative. and Bella is less of a cusser aha,
Anyway this story is absolutly wonderfull im hooked, and please try and update soon! I noticed you really like reviews well if i could offer a few tips?
Try and update every so often, dont take too long or people will lose intrest.
Your chapters are amazing as they are, but if possible try and make them longer.
Also try to make everything as realistic as posible, and Explain everything that needs to be explained. For example: His mother being able to read minds is a bit odd, why can she do that? Also Who is this Elizabeth Mary?
Update sonn!
Ok Whose Elizabeth Mary? There are two elizabeths? One is Edward Mother, now whose the second? Thats been confusing me to no end.
And also Edward mother can read minds? What is she, and why can she do that?
And one last thing Just to help you out abit, the characters have been Somewhat Ooc. Carlisle is usually more loving, and caring towards his patients. Edward is more shy, and conservative. and Bella is less of a cusser aha,
Anyway this story is absolutly wonderfull im hooked, and please try and update soon! I noticed you really like reviews well if i could offer a few tips?
Try and update every so often, dont take too long or people will lose intrest.
Your chapters are amazing as they are, but if possible try and make them longer.
Also try to make everything as realistic as posible, and Explain everything that needs to be explained. For example: His mother being able to read minds is a bit odd, why can she do that? Also Who is this Elizabeth Mary?
Update sonn!
12/30/2007 c4 BellaCinderella
i think your writing is excellent, and the whole idea is very original. I really like thi story!
The only thing i have to say is I think Edward might be a bit too forward. For him too offer to carry someone, and a women at that, is out of character for this time frame. I think hed be more embamarrased to have to suggest it, or to call Bella Sweet heart. Besides that it is excellent.
i think your writing is excellent, and the whole idea is very original. I really like thi story!
The only thing i have to say is I think Edward might be a bit too forward. For him too offer to carry someone, and a women at that, is out of character for this time frame. I think hed be more embamarrased to have to suggest it, or to call Bella Sweet heart. Besides that it is excellent.