for When the Moon Rises11/4/2008 c7 
3WE.should.call.it.mankind
aww damm i just started reading the story to! argh! hope u can update soon!
3WE.should.call.it.mankindaww damm i just started reading the story to! argh! hope u can update soon!
2/20/2008 c4 socorro13
aw this couple kinda reminds me of bells n Edward! I luv that couple! Awesome job so far. ;)
aw this couple kinda reminds me of bells n Edward! I luv that couple! Awesome job so far. ;)
12/26/2007 c5 12Sakiru Yume
I like it so far. Try to post again soon and work on your grammar. Other than that, it's good. Kage should kiss her. =] Hehehe.
Mwahahahaha!
12Sakiru YumeI like it so far. Try to post again soon and work on your grammar. Other than that, it's good. Kage should kiss her. =] Hehehe.
Mwahahahaha!
12/19/2007 c4 19lightpathetic
lol. I am not a fan of OC fics but yours is a fun one. I like the leads. I am interested in their romance.
Not a bad effort but you really rushed some parts. Like the fight scene in chapter 4. It could have been longer, clearer and more of a chance to show Kage protecting the female characters and becoming more appealing to Miyako (and us - it would be nice if we fell for him too!)
Cute though.
19lightpatheticlol. I am not a fan of OC fics but yours is a fun one. I like the leads. I am interested in their romance.
Not a bad effort but you really rushed some parts. Like the fight scene in chapter 4. It could have been longer, clearer and more of a chance to show Kage protecting the female characters and becoming more appealing to Miyako (and us - it would be nice if we fell for him too!)
Cute though.
12/2/2007 c2 5Kairuthefrog
Yay Maggie! another story. this ones pretty good, just some grammar and punctutation stuff!
5KairuthefrogYay Maggie! another story. this ones pretty good, just some grammar and punctutation stuff!
12/2/2007 c1 7Huor Spinks
Hm, so far so good. I'm quite interested to find out what happens next, so congratulations on that. I'm also quite interested in your OCs as well, though the boy seems a bit weird. I mean, it would be quite impossible to remain calm when you are after all being threatened, but I guess a reason would come sooner or later about that, right?
Your summary isn't too good though. You shouldn't put that you are a new-comer in your summary, because people tend to be more harsh on them. It also looks more professional if you don't. A summary is supposed to give a brief introduction to your story as well as to whet the appetite of the person who may want to read your story, so it would not be very wise to put irrelevant stuff there. It's not very good to put parings in your summary either, because it gives too much information to your reader, you should want to keep them in suspense.
Well, that's all I have to say at the moment. Rest assured, I'll be hanging on to read more of your work. Thank you, and have a nice day.
7Huor SpinksHm, so far so good. I'm quite interested to find out what happens next, so congratulations on that. I'm also quite interested in your OCs as well, though the boy seems a bit weird. I mean, it would be quite impossible to remain calm when you are after all being threatened, but I guess a reason would come sooner or later about that, right?
Your summary isn't too good though. You shouldn't put that you are a new-comer in your summary, because people tend to be more harsh on them. It also looks more professional if you don't. A summary is supposed to give a brief introduction to your story as well as to whet the appetite of the person who may want to read your story, so it would not be very wise to put irrelevant stuff there. It's not very good to put parings in your summary either, because it gives too much information to your reader, you should want to keep them in suspense.
Well, that's all I have to say at the moment. Rest assured, I'll be hanging on to read more of your work. Thank you, and have a nice day.