for Harry Potter and the Invincible TechnoMage11/5 c25 Dad
Why some mystery and subtlety is appropriate , not stating who you are talking about shortly thereafter in the next few paragraphs is really annoying for those of us who don't figure it out.
You never did say who Victor's date was at the ball or who HE was talking to Daphne and Millicent. And it took a couple chapters to reveal Tracey was the subject of her Grandfather's scorn
However your spelling and grammar was much better than average and not cringe to read.
Why some mystery and subtlety is appropriate , not stating who you are talking about shortly thereafter in the next few paragraphs is really annoying for those of us who don't figure it out.
You never did say who Victor's date was at the ball or who HE was talking to Daphne and Millicent. And it took a couple chapters to reveal Tracey was the subject of her Grandfather's scorn
However your spelling and grammar was much better than average and not cringe to read.
9/5 c25 Raine
Fantastic story! Really love how you integrate the worlds together. I hope you get to continue this story. It's just too good to leave unfinished. Thanks for writing
Fantastic story! Really love how you integrate the worlds together. I hope you get to continue this story. It's just too good to leave unfinished. Thanks for writing
8/23 c25 
4FireWood123
Hey, this is probably my 7th time reading this fic as it is one of if not the best on the entire website. The way you seemlessly include the Marvel Universe inside the Harry Potter one is incredible. I know its been a while since your last upload and even if you decide thats enough i wanted to thank you for the story. I do hope you continue it though as I cant wait to read the end.
Thanks !
4FireWood123Hey, this is probably my 7th time reading this fic as it is one of if not the best on the entire website. The way you seemlessly include the Marvel Universe inside the Harry Potter one is incredible. I know its been a while since your last upload and even if you decide thats enough i wanted to thank you for the story. I do hope you continue it though as I cant wait to read the end.
Thanks !
8/20 c25 Visionless1
salute to Chilord! Yeah, I read the one story he completed on here. decent writing. I hope that you do actually finish this one. I didn't check when you last updated it, but I am finding that many of the more interesting stories on here are either complete, or the author up and disappeared never completing a compelling story.
salute to Chilord! Yeah, I read the one story he completed on here. decent writing. I hope that you do actually finish this one. I didn't check when you last updated it, but I am finding that many of the more interesting stories on here are either complete, or the author up and disappeared never completing a compelling story.
8/18 c25 Guest
I don't understand how this story is written by the same person who wrote the sun source. This is a giant turd. An inconsistent mess of poorly thought out idiocy. It starts out with a powerful Harry who is a master of wandless magic and has been taught by all these powerful people. Then it progressively forgets all of it. Magic is rarely even done in this story, and things that can be done with magic are complained about while doing nothing. There is no focus on magic or even much on technology. Its a mess. While he should be developing and become stronger as the years pass it feels like hes going the other way. To end it all your final chapter you actually cucked your main character.
Then there is the biggest plot hole out all of those powerful magical teachers none of them noticed a soul fragment in his scar.
I don't understand how this story is written by the same person who wrote the sun source. This is a giant turd. An inconsistent mess of poorly thought out idiocy. It starts out with a powerful Harry who is a master of wandless magic and has been taught by all these powerful people. Then it progressively forgets all of it. Magic is rarely even done in this story, and things that can be done with magic are complained about while doing nothing. There is no focus on magic or even much on technology. Its a mess. While he should be developing and become stronger as the years pass it feels like hes going the other way. To end it all your final chapter you actually cucked your main character.
Then there is the biggest plot hole out all of those powerful magical teachers none of them noticed a soul fragment in his scar.
8/9 c3 pincho
I was enjoying the story until the bs with apologizing to Snape. That just soured it. Not because Snape can't be a decent human being but because in thus story like canon he isn't a decent human being. If your to make nice with Snape the whole scene in the previous chapter should have been thrown out and rewritten.
Whats next a misunderstood Draco?
I was enjoying the story until the bs with apologizing to Snape. That just soured it. Not because Snape can't be a decent human being but because in thus story like canon he isn't a decent human being. If your to make nice with Snape the whole scene in the previous chapter should have been thrown out and rewritten.
Whats next a misunderstood Draco?
6/25 c24 N. A. Wennerholm
Quite frankly I think the Wizarding world needs a scare that they can not continue as they have since the rest of the world will not put up with their behavior and actions any longer. Even Dr. Doom doesn't like what he has seen and heard that has been going on with the U.K. magical community. I know Elizabeth would continue to put up with their crap. May she rest in peace in fact with what I have been seeing I don't think she would be too happy with Charles right now.
Quite frankly I think the Wizarding world needs a scare that they can not continue as they have since the rest of the world will not put up with their behavior and actions any longer. Even Dr. Doom doesn't like what he has seen and heard that has been going on with the U.K. magical community. I know Elizabeth would continue to put up with their crap. May she rest in peace in fact with what I have been seeing I don't think she would be too happy with Charles right now.
6/24 c3 geoslim21
The apology to that bastard snape makes no sense. he was in the wrong not harry. but im guessing your another snape fanboy
The apology to that bastard snape makes no sense. he was in the wrong not harry. but im guessing your another snape fanboy
6/16 c8 1trend breaker
i was interested but theres to many damn flash backs if your going to have that many just nake it the beggining if the story or another book all together
1trend breakeri was interested but theres to many damn flash backs if your going to have that many just nake it the beggining if the story or another book all together
5/29 c1 5KzintiKiller
The muse on this one pack up and flee the country? A genuine pity. Very creative and entertaining.
5KzintiKillerThe muse on this one pack up and flee the country? A genuine pity. Very creative and entertaining.
5/2 c14 Vampireking40
As I was a cub scout and did build two pinewood derby cars. I love the idea of Harry having been a cub scout. Only someone like Tony Stark could create a pinewood derby car that could do that. Who is the person that called Hermonie a mudblood and which Slytherin is he talking too. It seems to be possibly Greengrass and Bulstrode.
As I was a cub scout and did build two pinewood derby cars. I love the idea of Harry having been a cub scout. Only someone like Tony Stark could create a pinewood derby car that could do that. Who is the person that called Hermonie a mudblood and which Slytherin is he talking too. It seems to be possibly Greengrass and Bulstrode.
5/2 c9 Vampireking40
Great chapter as always. Love the appearance of Jennifer Walters aka She-Hulk. What she did to Lockhart was great. Now Lupin will make an appearance a year earlier then cannon and Sirius Black is a free man. At least he is seeing what Harry said as logic and will do his own thing to get to know Harry better and not follow Dumbledore orders. He is now an adult and does not have to do whatever his old headmaster saids any longer.
Great chapter as always. Love the appearance of Jennifer Walters aka She-Hulk. What she did to Lockhart was great. Now Lupin will make an appearance a year earlier then cannon and Sirius Black is a free man. At least he is seeing what Harry said as logic and will do his own thing to get to know Harry better and not follow Dumbledore orders. He is now an adult and does not have to do whatever his old headmaster saids any longer.