for Flowers in Winter1/6/2008 c9 patatepoil
As I said, I like to see the other point of view! It's nice!
But wouldn't it be more logical if there wouldn't be a chapter between the Hermione pov and the Severus pov? The chapter "awkward" could be after, no?
Because at first, I was kind of lost then I noticed that it was the Snape side of the chapter 7.
Oh and the "old fashioned thing". Really funny! :)
As I said, I like to see the other point of view! It's nice!
But wouldn't it be more logical if there wouldn't be a chapter between the Hermione pov and the Severus pov? The chapter "awkward" could be after, no?
Because at first, I was kind of lost then I noticed that it was the Snape side of the chapter 7.
Oh and the "old fashioned thing". Really funny! :)
1/6/2008 c8 patatepoil
"Am I supposed to be a bit early, or a bit late, or perfectly on time? AH!"
Ahah funny! Everyone is asking this question at least one in his life! :)
"Am I supposed to be a bit early, or a bit late, or perfectly on time? AH!"
Ahah funny! Everyone is asking this question at least one in his life! :)
1/6/2008 c6 patatepoil
It's nice to see he's point of view of the last chapter! Why is Hermione blushing? Maybe I'll see it next... :)
It's nice to see he's point of view of the last chapter! Why is Hermione blushing? Maybe I'll see it next... :)
1/6/2008 c2 patatepoil
Great chapter too. Little longer, but still hoping for something even longer (I like big chapters :P).
There's just something I don't really understand. Might be because I'm a french Canadian and I don't understand well eveything in English, but well... I'll copy you the extract I didn't understand.
-would explain it but I mean come-
Now let's read chapter 3!
Great chapter too. Little longer, but still hoping for something even longer (I like big chapters :P).
There's just something I don't really understand. Might be because I'm a french Canadian and I don't understand well eveything in English, but well... I'll copy you the extract I didn't understand.
-would explain it but I mean come-
Now let's read chapter 3!
1/6/2008 c1 patatepoil
Let's review each chapter as you wanted!
The first chapter is great. Kind of a prologue.
We don't know much of the story but enough for wanting to continue reading. I hope the next one is longer! Let's see... :)
Let's review each chapter as you wanted!
The first chapter is great. Kind of a prologue.
We don't know much of the story but enough for wanting to continue reading. I hope the next one is longer! Let's see... :)
1/6/2008 c14 
3EruthiadwenGreenleaf
Now I really feel bad for Hermione! And Severus, oh dear lord, I hope he isn't the one who will have to kill her parents...that would be horrible :( Looking forward to the next chapter!
Tish
3EruthiadwenGreenleafNow I really feel bad for Hermione! And Severus, oh dear lord, I hope he isn't the one who will have to kill her parents...that would be horrible :( Looking forward to the next chapter!
Tish
1/3/2008 c13 7Siriusluver-le
Awesomely intense...It definitely bumps the tension way, way up...and I don't think it's cheesy at all. And trust me...I'm probably the master of cheesy love scenes...or rather is said in mine is...I think it was really good!
7Siriusluver-leAwesomely intense...It definitely bumps the tension way, way up...and I don't think it's cheesy at all. And trust me...I'm probably the master of cheesy love scenes...or rather is said in mine is...I think it was really good!
12/30/2007 c13 65notwritten
Very nice chapter. Very enjoyable. You have to update in the future. Happy New Year. Keep Smiling. :-)
65notwrittenVery nice chapter. Very enjoyable. You have to update in the future. Happy New Year. Keep Smiling. :-)
12/30/2007 c13 3IAmTheBadWolf315
Aw, I liked this chapter, it's all nice and long and full of description...I LOVED IT!
3IAmTheBadWolf315Aw, I liked this chapter, it's all nice and long and full of description...I LOVED IT!
12/30/2007 c13 makya
I think the chapter was very good though the time transition was a little confusing and perhaps some sort of symbol on the page would solve that just to show a break. But the writing and content are very good and I can't wait for more.
I think the chapter was very good though the time transition was a little confusing and perhaps some sort of symbol on the page would solve that just to show a break. But the writing and content are very good and I can't wait for more.
12/30/2007 c13 66debjunk
I didn't think the content was too cheesy at all. I liked it. Your transition from Severus entering her mind to back when she apparated to his house was really confusing though. It took me pretty much the whole paragraph to figure out what was going on. There are horizontal lines that you can add when editing for breaks. That would help. Or you could have both of their feelings, experiences in the same part of the story instead of jumping around. I liked that Severus is already thinking about her.
66debjunkI didn't think the content was too cheesy at all. I liked it. Your transition from Severus entering her mind to back when she apparated to his house was really confusing though. It took me pretty much the whole paragraph to figure out what was going on. There are horizontal lines that you can add when editing for breaks. That would help. Or you could have both of their feelings, experiences in the same part of the story instead of jumping around. I liked that Severus is already thinking about her.
12/30/2007 c13 3EruthiadwenGreenleaf
I think this was a lovely chapter! I love how you described everything Severus pointed out concerning Hermione and her being grown up now...I'm excited to see what happens next! Great job again!
Tish
3EruthiadwenGreenleafI think this was a lovely chapter! I love how you described everything Severus pointed out concerning Hermione and her being grown up now...I'm excited to see what happens next! Great job again!
Tish