for The Trials of An Expectant Mother6/6/2011 c1 
5kailthia
Your story is well-done. No complaints about that, but the formatting sucks. It's really hard to follow the (well-written) story because it's in block.
5kailthiaYour story is well-done. No complaints about that, but the formatting sucks. It's really hard to follow the (well-written) story because it's in block.
8/3/2010 c1 6Kasumi Suwa
Love the story!
I thought it was really good!
I just have a suggestion to make it easier to read...When a diffrent character talks, start a new paragraph. Ir readers.t just makes it easier to keep track of the dialogue. It's okay because a lot of people don't do that, but it'll make it easier for your readers. Also after a certain scene make another paragraph...that also makes it easier to read.
Other than that I loved it! It's a great story!
6Kasumi SuwaLove the story!
I thought it was really good!
I just have a suggestion to make it easier to read...When a diffrent character talks, start a new paragraph. Ir readers.t just makes it easier to keep track of the dialogue. It's okay because a lot of people don't do that, but it'll make it easier for your readers. Also after a certain scene make another paragraph...that also makes it easier to read.
Other than that I loved it! It's a great story!
6/28/2010 c1 Jesy
Is hard to read, mm very hard in paragraphs had been easier but you fic is soy pretty =)
Is hard to read, mm very hard in paragraphs had been easier but you fic is soy pretty =)
8/20/2009 c1 Jane Black278
I love it! very good fic! ;D for the next time, you should try to separate the writing, not to be not only a big text and not be so tight.
take care ;) bye :*
I love it! very good fic! ;D for the next time, you should try to separate the writing, not to be not only a big text and not be so tight.
take care ;) bye :*
8/16/2009 c1 koinu
please put your stories in paragraphs. Not everyone has good eyesight, and this really strains ones eyes
please put your stories in paragraphs. Not everyone has good eyesight, and this really strains ones eyes
6/16/2009 c1 2Baby-Cabana
great story i like the way it progressed, but word of advice, paragraghs are your friends! lol :P
2Baby-Cabanagreat story i like the way it progressed, but word of advice, paragraghs are your friends! lol :P
6/6/2008 c1 purpletwist
that was the cutest story I have ever read about goku and Chchi
that was the cutest story I have ever read about goku and Chchi
1/21/2008 c1 8Goten4eva
Heyy ppl, quit giving her negative reviews! Okay, yes it would've been nice for it to be in paragraphs, but I managed to read it. It was a good fic! Keep up da good work! (next time write it in paragraphs!)
8Goten4evaHeyy ppl, quit giving her negative reviews! Okay, yes it would've been nice for it to be in paragraphs, but I managed to read it. It was a good fic! Keep up da good work! (next time write it in paragraphs!)
1/14/2008 c1 tintin
hun, if you would write it in a way so I could read it, I would.
But this mass of lineslineslines hurts my eyes. Format is, please!
hun, if you would write it in a way so I could read it, I would.
But this mass of lineslineslines hurts my eyes. Format is, please!
1/11/2008 c1 that's the way love goes
Paragraphs would be a nice thing, then it would be so much easier to read especially for me since my eyes are crap.
Paragraphs would be a nice thing, then it would be so much easier to read especially for me since my eyes are crap.
1/9/2008 c1 JamesBluntSucks
have u not heard of paragraphs?
have u not heard of paragraphs?