
1/8/2008 c1 Reviewercrazy
HI. I started reading your story and it sounds very very interesting. From what I read you are a very good writer but as I kept reading my eyes started getting tired. You've got a lot of writing and not a lot of blank spaces. You really need to break up those huge blocks of writing into more easily digestible little ones. Take a look at Chocolateblood's stories. They are perfectly formatted.
HI. I started reading your story and it sounds very very interesting. From what I read you are a very good writer but as I kept reading my eyes started getting tired. You've got a lot of writing and not a lot of blank spaces. You really need to break up those huge blocks of writing into more easily digestible little ones. Take a look at Chocolateblood's stories. They are perfectly formatted.