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2/1/2018 c1 Guest
YAY!400th review! Congrats :)
I think this story is gonna be awesome! -
12/4/2017 c19 Kushka
Good story
3/3/2017 c19 Kushka
Great story
4/27/2016 c19 Binka
You know, I really enjoyed this story, more than Twilight in fact. But I was really disappointed by the ending. I think a more cockey, more forceful Bella as you have here would have refused to have the venom sucked out once she'd been bitten. SM's Bella thought too much about other people, she was quite sensitive to others needs for the most part anyway, she dithered back and forth over her parents and Jacob and drove Edward crazy. Your Bella seems to be the sort who says what she thinks, is very straight forward and would go after what she wanted once she knew what that was. I think it's obvious to all of us that what she wants is Edward and from the conversation she had with Alice about the change, she knew the only way to get him for good was to become a vampire like him. You did an excellent job altering the original Twilight plot enough to make this a great read, but the ending is too close to SM's to fit in with your other changes. Please take this as constructive criticism and keep in mind that I'm in no way a professional, I'm just an avid reader and my opinion, such as it is, is just one of many.
5/28/2015 c19 Char
Not even an epilogue? Bitch move right there
1/18/2014 c19 Motherof8
Good job. Nice take on twilight. Thanks
1/18/2014 c14 Motherof8
That was sweet
1/18/2014 c9 Motherof8
Nice, well written story
1/18/2014 c8 Motherof8
He is so confusing
1/18/2014 c6 Motherof8
That was a bit funny
1/18/2014 c5 Motherof8
Poor Bella, she has to deal with him
1/18/2014 c3 Motherof8
Yay
2/17/2013 c19 WinterSoulZ
Ok so this is the ending
This ending suck
It would have been good if u were going to make a a sequel
5/8/2012 c9 SPHKDR
I know how to make Edward not brood about being a vamp

EDWARD TALKING~Scene~ Bella talking

"I'm a monster Bella please grasp that" said Edward "why" "why what" now he looked confused "why are you a monster" "because I'm a blood sucking demon with no soul" "Edward that's rediculous the simple act of becoming a vampire wil not take away your soul furthermore any person who thinks Alice esme Emmett and Carlisle do not have souls is an idiot also a monster is someone who enjoys others pain who dilibretly causes someon like murderers rapists molesters is a monster,so tell me Edward am I dating a monster" Edward was speech less hiss jaw agape then smiled and answered "no Bella I'm pleased to inform you that you are not dating a monster but you are dating an embarrassed vampire boyfriend echo loves you more than the world
11/3/2011 c19 Edward's spouse
excellent story.
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