for Harry Potter and the Other World5/2/2012 c3 
11Syrlai
Jadis was bad enough, now Voldy too? If those two came together and got busy, their children would probably be devil spawn lol
11SyrlaiJadis was bad enough, now Voldy too? If those two came together and got busy, their children would probably be devil spawn lol
5/2/2012 c2 Syrlai
This is the most decent piece of fiction I have ever read of Harry Potter/Chronicles of Narnia crossover. You, my dear author, are one hell of a writer.
This is the most decent piece of fiction I have ever read of Harry Potter/Chronicles of Narnia crossover. You, my dear author, are one hell of a writer.
3/17/2012 c3 7FallingIntoRain
This story is amazing! But I have one pointer though: Don't use so much magic.
7FallingIntoRainThis story is amazing! But I have one pointer though: Don't use so much magic.
11/24/2011 c9 32Elf Knight
Wow! That was a pretty cool story. I actually read the whole thing this evening from start to finish. While I was sad that they had to leave, it was a good ending and I had a good chuckle picturing Harry using Deep Magic against Voldermort. It could have been longer but I enjoyed it and the magic in the story was awesome. It was cool how the Horcuxe in Harry was destroyed but what about the other ones? Cool story though, I really enjoyed it! :)
32Elf KnightWow! That was a pretty cool story. I actually read the whole thing this evening from start to finish. While I was sad that they had to leave, it was a good ending and I had a good chuckle picturing Harry using Deep Magic against Voldermort. It could have been longer but I enjoyed it and the magic in the story was awesome. It was cool how the Horcuxe in Harry was destroyed but what about the other ones? Cool story though, I really enjoyed it! :)
11/12/2011 c9 17CandyGirl999
This was amazing. THIS WAS SPECTACULAR! Harry defeating Voldemort with Deep Magic has got to be the most epic thing I've ever read.
The story itself was amazing seeing as you managed to tie the two story lines of the two books together so well. However there are a couple of problems that you might want to fix just to help the story be more beleivable.
For one, in the middle of the 5th book just before the battle at the Department of Ministry, McGonagall was taken to St. Mungos so theres no way she would have been at Hogwarts in chapter one. I'm sure this could be easily solved with a rewrite and having a different professor be there when the kids take down Umbridge.
And you never mentioned exactly HOW Voldemort met up with the White Witch or how he got into the wardrobe or how he got into the Room of Reqirement in the first place seeing as it was suppose to keep Harry and the others hidden.
Also I'm confused as to why Voldemort beleived he killed Harry when he himself got thrown out of Narnia by him. That part dosn't make sense. I think what would have been better is if you left out Voldemort going into Narnia ENTIRELY and just focused on the seven trying to defeat the White Witch and having the kids get more acqainted with one another beforehand.
And I'm sure you've already been told this but at the end of the Narnia books, everyone except for Susan dies so Harry's phone call to Peter wouldn't make much sence either.
Those are the only things that I felt should be fixed. I know you wrote this story three years ago and you've probably stopped looking at reviews for it but I just thought you might wanna polish it up a bit.
Only cuz this is the first HP/Narnia fic I've read that seems so possible that I just wanna see it written to it's absolute best! Thats how much this fic means to me. I hope you will concider it.
See ya. And keep writeing cuz you've really got talent.
17CandyGirl999This was amazing. THIS WAS SPECTACULAR! Harry defeating Voldemort with Deep Magic has got to be the most epic thing I've ever read.
The story itself was amazing seeing as you managed to tie the two story lines of the two books together so well. However there are a couple of problems that you might want to fix just to help the story be more beleivable.
For one, in the middle of the 5th book just before the battle at the Department of Ministry, McGonagall was taken to St. Mungos so theres no way she would have been at Hogwarts in chapter one. I'm sure this could be easily solved with a rewrite and having a different professor be there when the kids take down Umbridge.
And you never mentioned exactly HOW Voldemort met up with the White Witch or how he got into the wardrobe or how he got into the Room of Reqirement in the first place seeing as it was suppose to keep Harry and the others hidden.
Also I'm confused as to why Voldemort beleived he killed Harry when he himself got thrown out of Narnia by him. That part dosn't make sense. I think what would have been better is if you left out Voldemort going into Narnia ENTIRELY and just focused on the seven trying to defeat the White Witch and having the kids get more acqainted with one another beforehand.
And I'm sure you've already been told this but at the end of the Narnia books, everyone except for Susan dies so Harry's phone call to Peter wouldn't make much sence either.
Those are the only things that I felt should be fixed. I know you wrote this story three years ago and you've probably stopped looking at reviews for it but I just thought you might wanna polish it up a bit.
Only cuz this is the first HP/Narnia fic I've read that seems so possible that I just wanna see it written to it's absolute best! Thats how much this fic means to me. I hope you will concider it.
See ya. And keep writeing cuz you've really got talent.
11/12/2011 c6 CandyGirl999
This is REALLY getting interesting! And the fact that Harry had to die in retrebution for killing Bellatrix was a nice twist.
But it would have been better if you had written a chapter explaining exactly HOW Voldemort and the White Witch meet up and how Bellatrix found Harry so that it all makes better sense.
This is REALLY getting interesting! And the fact that Harry had to die in retrebution for killing Bellatrix was a nice twist.
But it would have been better if you had written a chapter explaining exactly HOW Voldemort and the White Witch meet up and how Bellatrix found Harry so that it all makes better sense.