for Just a little persuasion4/17/2008 c1 
1Arbitrary Doom
...it's an interesting idea...i wouldn't mind seeing shindo lose ;)...XP!
1Arbitrary Doom...it's an interesting idea...i wouldn't mind seeing shindo lose ;)...XP!
1/25/2008 c1 Delete Me Forever 3333333
I like this one, but I think you've left a little too much to the imagination. One thing you could do is have Kyoya pat the pocket with the picture before he enters, as if he is certain that will clench it. Then describe the picture ever so slightly, such as Shindo being draped in the twins as he enters their house. The fact that he's teaching isn't that abnormal since all the lower Dans are expected to and we've seen him teach at events. I think it has to be drawn out ever so slightly. I liked Akira's assessment of Shindo's style. Nicely written.
I like this one, but I think you've left a little too much to the imagination. One thing you could do is have Kyoya pat the pocket with the picture before he enters, as if he is certain that will clench it. Then describe the picture ever so slightly, such as Shindo being draped in the twins as he enters their house. The fact that he's teaching isn't that abnormal since all the lower Dans are expected to and we've seen him teach at events. I think it has to be drawn out ever so slightly. I liked Akira's assessment of Shindo's style. Nicely written.
1/24/2008 c1 zeynel
Love this part! So cold and calculating... Typical Ootori *grins*
But then, he has an advantage! i mean, He may have less time to learn go, but his teacher actually KNOW the specific go that will be taught to his adversories, so he is therefore better prepared!
Love this part! So cold and calculating... Typical Ootori *grins*
But then, he has an advantage! i mean, He may have less time to learn go, but his teacher actually KNOW the specific go that will be taught to his adversories, so he is therefore better prepared!
1/22/2008 c1 4SeikaDragon
Already understood. He only agreed to help because Hikaru was involved. Shindou will canceled their games?
I wonder what his reasons and why he is angry with Shindou?
4SeikaDragonAlready understood. He only agreed to help because Hikaru was involved. Shindou will canceled their games?
I wonder what his reasons and why he is angry with Shindou?