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3/31/2008 c3 scione
well you did good evrything looks good i wont vote callz all your pics are the ones i would pic lol so see you next chapter.
3/31/2008 c3 spedclass
Awesome chapter keep up the good work and update soon!
3/30/2008 c2 hannibal221
hey wanted to know who all was in the harem? if hinata isn't don't expect me to keep reading...by the way Benihime does not mean red princess it means crimson princess aka means red like akamaru kiba even explains that during his fight with naruto in the chuunin exams
3/30/2008 c3 16animefan29
Well you still have the some of the same grammar problems, but you have gotten better. The same goes for your description of the story, just work on the flow there. Otherwise you are getting better.

While Lee and Gai might be a little put off by this dark and somewhat bloodthirsty Naruto, I like them so I vote for them.

Chouji and Shikamaru get a vote because Ino is going and those three work well together, and those two are among those who were nicer to Naruto.

The Aburame are cool so they get a vote, but they can only join up with Naruto if it is for a logical reason. They do nothing based on emotion.

I will vote for Anko because because she can easily understand Naruto, and if she finds that Sarutobi was manipulating the boy she would abandon Konoha in a heartbeat.

Tsunade and Shizune get the last two votes because I don't feel that your version of Konoha deserves Tsunade, Naruto's group will need a healer, and where Tsunada goes so does Shizune.
3/22/2008 c1 Shank5
interesting storie but need longer chapters
3/21/2008 c2 animefan29
Ok, I like your idea and where you might be going with this, but I have a few problems. First is the grammar errors, you dont have as many as some people do, but they are rather obvious and could have been easily caught by a proof-readers. Second is lack of detail. Some authors got down on the length of their story by being imprecise aobut details, or compleatly forgoing them. That is a bad road to take in my opinion. If you want to keep certain details secret until a later time that is fine, but I felt the whole Kyuubi revealing things to Naruto was a not as good as it could have been. And to be precise on the name Benihime means crimzon princess. And that is a totally awsome Zanpaktou.
3/21/2008 c1 animefan29
That is one specific prophecy. But sounds interesting.
3/11/2008 c2 Lyon Ryuushi
Major gramattical errors and it's Red Queen
3/10/2008 c2 Jfitzgerald
Please update again soon. THanks.
3/9/2008 c2 4Sunabouzu
good a little short and vague but good
3/5/2008 c2 Lloyd Neruameshi
whose in the harem
2/26/2008 c2 XxEro-GakixX
No offense but this would barely be considered a chapter
2/26/2008 c2 blackstardragon624
write the story and stop teasing me teme
2/19/2008 c2 2Blackfang1983
please write more of this story
2/2/2008 c2 sap
what, exactly inspired you to think of this idea like a list of fanfiction of great skill hm?

if thier is none from that role then i suggest a, few powerful writers here

Thunderreapear(just search dichotomy of namikaze naruto hes the author)

General Grivious(sp)

Demon God of Chaos(an expert on lemons or fan fiction's sex)

spedclass: an expert on finding fanfics of such caliber(look above)

now for constructive critisism

ok look this story is more like a one-shot per chapter

and you dont have that much discription so it seems your trying to skip to the good part of your fanfic where you have expertly done a possible good job there hm?

well here at this website, we are not stupid we are all highly educated in the art of discovering quallity, excellant fanfiction all newbs will soon obtain this skill too. except for N00BS who dont deserve to be here

so plan out your fan fic so that people are captured in the begining of the story to the end even your summary should be a part of the story not where it merely plays out what you are to do. but to be an attachment to your story to capture readers in

a note on reviews:look for reviews that obtain a large space for constructive critisism and ignore flames unless what they point out to you is correct and ignore those reviewers such as "update soon" people since that is false feedback where they only need something to take up thier time which in my thoughts is pathetic.

beta readers: these are the "do or die" people for the grammer spelling and typos every one makes, where you give over your account to some one you trust with great skill to revise your story correctly

how ever there are those who wish to make your story worst in that after the revision process than before which can happen and does exsist

here are the DO NOTS and DONT READS for males

yaoi: homo sexuallity for men(lots of girls here read them not all of them however)

Mpreg: male pregnancy

fem(name of charcter) unless thier fem-kyuubi or fem-haku this is ILLEGAL in a man's mind just too akward for something such as a fem-konohamaru,neji,lee(WTF) other than that if you do them right then thier ok like if thier meant for humor then do as many as possible

my particular favorites in specific generes

fem kakashi(HUMOR)

fem sasuke(some times a male compatible version of yaoi accepted by some)

fem garra( ive seen one with her and a fem shukaku(one tail demon) get it on with a evil naruto(m rated)

fem itachi( ive seen it only TWICE) where one of which was for a romance and time travel fic with gender bending, the other for the same humor as fem kakashi

fem-kyuubi: my personal favorite pairing for naruto(charcter not story)

OC's: ok its all right to have one or two oc's, they can actually be anything you want and they can also be pairing with some one where you dont think no one is copatible in a pairing with some one so you make a custom girl for that charcter and in other situations(like making a love triangle)

but for something like "heir to the throne" where there are too many OCs and crossover charcters will ruin the story

super powered narutos: now if some one hates how kishimaro lays out naruto as a idiot they have full acsess to this as long as thier is a good plot

this review is long enough ill post another one when possible

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