for Fragmented2/8/2020 c1 Ryn
Whoa! What a ride thru Brendan's tortured mind! Well-written!
Whoa! What a ride thru Brendan's tortured mind! Well-written!
1/21/2016 c1 Guest
I'm not even in this fandom nor have I heard of it but great job on the writing. It's made of effort and experience that I have never seen in fan made writing before.
I'm not even in this fandom nor have I heard of it but great job on the writing. It's made of effort and experience that I have never seen in fan made writing before.
4/9/2013 c1 
24Harmne
Ooh, good story. I've never gotten to see Thoughtcrimes, I can't find it anywhere except a UK Region 2 DVD that wouldn't play on my system. I would LOVE to see it, though! I can see Joe Flanigan as Brendan, he'd have been great in the role if it had made it to a series. Too bad they won't go back and do it now, I have withdrawals from my weekly fix of him on TV... Stupid TV executives...
24HarmneOoh, good story. I've never gotten to see Thoughtcrimes, I can't find it anywhere except a UK Region 2 DVD that wouldn't play on my system. I would LOVE to see it, though! I can see Joe Flanigan as Brendan, he'd have been great in the role if it had made it to a series. Too bad they won't go back and do it now, I have withdrawals from my weekly fix of him on TV... Stupid TV executives...
5/20/2008 c1 6CazzBlade
Love this!
Thanx for keeping me entertained while I write my essays! :D
Cazz x
6CazzBladeLove this!
Thanx for keeping me entertained while I write my essays! :D
Cazz x
3/19/2008 c1 GW
I haven't read any Thoughtcrimes fic before this, but since I love this author, I decided to take a look. I think I'm hooked on a new fandom now. This was really good. Even though I'm not familiar with the characters, I could get a feel for who they are and what they're like from what was written. So many fanfic authors don't develop the characters because they're known to most readers. Stealth Dragon takes the time to do this and I'm glad for it. There's also a really interesting plot, and who doesn't love that?
I haven't read any Thoughtcrimes fic before this, but since I love this author, I decided to take a look. I think I'm hooked on a new fandom now. This was really good. Even though I'm not familiar with the characters, I could get a feel for who they are and what they're like from what was written. So many fanfic authors don't develop the characters because they're known to most readers. Stealth Dragon takes the time to do this and I'm glad for it. There's also a really interesting plot, and who doesn't love that?
1/25/2008 c1 22CoolBreeze1
Very cool! I haven't seen Thoughtcrimes yet, but I know the basic premise. And since Brendan is Sheppard is JF, it was easy to imagine. I've got to see that movie now...
22CoolBreeze1Very cool! I haven't seen Thoughtcrimes yet, but I know the basic premise. And since Brendan is Sheppard is JF, it was easy to imagine. I've got to see that movie now...
1/24/2008 c1 Karri-1671
YAY! You posted to FF. :sques and hugs you: I enjoyed reading it again. You always whump him so beautifully.
YAY! You posted to FF. :sques and hugs you: I enjoyed reading it again. You always whump him so beautifully.
1/24/2008 c1 2Ditzyleo
You handled this fabulously. Loved the vulerablity you showed, but you still had him totally in charcter - a hard trick but one you have mastered with a flare. Nice stuff!
2DitzyleoYou handled this fabulously. Loved the vulerablity you showed, but you still had him totally in charcter - a hard trick but one you have mastered with a flare. Nice stuff!
1/23/2008 c1 writerjc
Nice work! You did a terrific job. As much as I would have liked more of this show as a series, I'm happy the way things turned out. And it's nice to see that it has it's own section, now. :) Write more, please.
Nice work! You did a terrific job. As much as I would have liked more of this show as a series, I'm happy the way things turned out. And it's nice to see that it has it's own section, now. :) Write more, please.
1/23/2008 c1 78Titan5
Truly magnificent! I loved everything - from Brendan waking up half-naked and totally confused in the alley to the guards finding him to his near panic at not being able to remember. I loved Freya's concern and the way she looked out after him. The rape kit was handled very tastefully and I loved Brendan's mental comments on the process. The ending was so realistic and displayed the trauma that keeps on after the event is over. How could you not be paranoid after that? Wonderful, wonderful job!
78Titan5Truly magnificent! I loved everything - from Brendan waking up half-naked and totally confused in the alley to the guards finding him to his near panic at not being able to remember. I loved Freya's concern and the way she looked out after him. The rape kit was handled very tastefully and I loved Brendan's mental comments on the process. The ending was so realistic and displayed the trauma that keeps on after the event is over. How could you not be paranoid after that? Wonderful, wonderful job!
1/23/2008 c1 Mangst
This is wonderful. You made Brendan vulnerable without making him weak or out of character. Your opening scene was a great choice. It grabbed me immediately.
This is wonderful. You made Brendan vulnerable without making him weak or out of character. Your opening scene was a great choice. It grabbed me immediately.
1/23/2008 c1 23ga unicorn
Wonderful story. The characters were very well done. And I enjoyed how you handled slowly revealing what had happened to Brendan. Excellent.
23ga unicornWonderful story. The characters were very well done. And I enjoyed how you handled slowly revealing what had happened to Brendan. Excellent.