for The New Girl, Will She Be My Savour?4/2/2008 c2 
8thousand lies
wow cool story!
Please update, PLEASE...
Don't keep me waitig for too long!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Please update ASAP!
8thousand lieswow cool story!
Please update, PLEASE...
Don't keep me waitig for too long!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Please update ASAP!
2/14/2008 c1 1vAMPLIFIED
I think it's an okay start, but Im going to be honest and help out, =) If you're going to be serious about writing fanfics, you should, for one, edit your chapters, and even making them longer would be nice. Don't be afraid to put some detail in there, either! :-) For instance, more dialogue! I'm extremely sorry if this sounds like a flame, I don't want it to because I hate flamers myself, I'm just trying to help, but so far it's an okay start!
~Katy
1vAMPLIFIEDI think it's an okay start, but Im going to be honest and help out, =) If you're going to be serious about writing fanfics, you should, for one, edit your chapters, and even making them longer would be nice. Don't be afraid to put some detail in there, either! :-) For instance, more dialogue! I'm extremely sorry if this sounds like a flame, I don't want it to because I hate flamers myself, I'm just trying to help, but so far it's an okay start!
~Katy