for Not So Immortal3/27/2008 c1 
6M.infinity
Really short and sad. The overall tone seems really depressed and doesn't seem to fit the pairing. To me, this is one of the more humorous pairings, with him being so flirtatious and her being so strict. Also, the words you wrote seem to not apply so much to their personalities as they would to maybe... other characters. And it also mentions that he would never look her way, but in the manga and anime, doesn't he constantly hit on her and talk to her about different matters? Just wanted to point that out. Was really short and a good read, but sinec there are no names and no distinct characteristics, I could imagine this fanfiction being applied to most/some of the other Bleach pairings out there. Keep up the writing.
-A.P.
6M.infinityReally short and sad. The overall tone seems really depressed and doesn't seem to fit the pairing. To me, this is one of the more humorous pairings, with him being so flirtatious and her being so strict. Also, the words you wrote seem to not apply so much to their personalities as they would to maybe... other characters. And it also mentions that he would never look her way, but in the manga and anime, doesn't he constantly hit on her and talk to her about different matters? Just wanted to point that out. Was really short and a good read, but sinec there are no names and no distinct characteristics, I could imagine this fanfiction being applied to most/some of the other Bleach pairings out there. Keep up the writing.
-A.P.
3/26/2008 c1 47Yaraslava Rada
Hmm...Interesting...
V.short
Not really centered on one anime or pairing, at least that I could see...(sure you SAID that it's nanao/shunsui but really there's no specifics...)
Uhm...did I mention it's V.short? I'm not sure if I like it either...(at least it didn't take too long to read, ne?)
47Yaraslava RadaHmm...Interesting...
V.short
Not really centered on one anime or pairing, at least that I could see...(sure you SAID that it's nanao/shunsui but really there's no specifics...)
Uhm...did I mention it's V.short? I'm not sure if I like it either...(at least it didn't take too long to read, ne?)