for New Beginning5/26/2023 c2 
152rebecca-in-blue
This continues to feel kinda flat to me. Hermione comes off as passive and boring, closer to canon Bella than her canon self, and the SPaG gets a lot messier.
152rebecca-in-blueThis continues to feel kinda flat to me. Hermione comes off as passive and boring, closer to canon Bella than her canon self, and the SPaG gets a lot messier.
5/26/2023 c1 rebecca-in-blue
This is better written than a lot of crossovers between these two fandoms, although I do wish this first chapter had more going for it. There's never any real emotional connection between Hermione, Bella, or Charlie, and Hermione doesn't really show any signs of war trauma- - things feel kinda flat.
This is better written than a lot of crossovers between these two fandoms, although I do wish this first chapter had more going for it. There's never any real emotional connection between Hermione, Bella, or Charlie, and Hermione doesn't really show any signs of war trauma- - things feel kinda flat.
5/14/2020 c11 Guest
More please
More please
4/20/2020 c11 Guest
More please
More please
8/7/2017 c11 Fanta
Please carry on
Please carry on
3/15/2014 c11 Guest
Lovely!
Lovely!
12/30/2013 c5 Sono Chieri2
Did you mean "my apologies" or "I apologize"? "I apologies" doesn't make sense.
You don't need to say "don't forget to review" twice.
"This story is not abandonED." Past tense.
There are quite some glaringly obvious flaws in this, as is demonstrated in you note. However, the plot itself is very good. Keep updating, it's been nearly 4 years since you last did.
Did you mean "my apologies" or "I apologize"? "I apologies" doesn't make sense.
You don't need to say "don't forget to review" twice.
"This story is not abandonED." Past tense.
There are quite some glaringly obvious flaws in this, as is demonstrated in you note. However, the plot itself is very good. Keep updating, it's been nearly 4 years since you last did.
12/27/2013 c7 Sono Chieri2
It always says, "I am..." Never "I'm..."
Makes it sound all formal and weird.
It always says, "I am..." Never "I'm..."
Makes it sound all formal and weird.
6/12/2013 c11 10LillianMarie2
should you decide you want to pick this fic up again i would really like to read more.
10LillianMarie2should you decide you want to pick this fic up again i would really like to read more.
11/20/2012 c11 Naomi
Luv it! I'll be watching for updates!
Luv it! I'll be watching for updates!
11/19/2012 c11 sapphire
when do you plan on updating
when do you plan on updating