for 12 Rounds12/28/2010 c5 SimplyxApril
Awww Chelsea and John are so cute they need to kiss already gosh lol nice chapters
Awww Chelsea and John are so cute they need to kiss already gosh lol nice chapters
12/3/2008 c5 
4HardyDXEvolutionChick
Please don't tell me this story as been putt on hold. It's so cute!
4HardyDXEvolutionChickPlease don't tell me this story as been putt on hold. It's so cute!
9/21/2008 c5 31heart2handgun
I'm likin' it so far. Only one small piece of advice. So it's clear who exactly is talking, and this makes your chapters seem longer, space things out a lot more with paragraphs. Try a new paragraph for each character's lines, that way you could have a statement by them, some action and then some more dialogue without confusing the readers as to who is speaking.
Just some advice. But otherwise, super cute chapter. He just wants to tap that ;)
-AJ
31heart2handgunI'm likin' it so far. Only one small piece of advice. So it's clear who exactly is talking, and this makes your chapters seem longer, space things out a lot more with paragraphs. Try a new paragraph for each character's lines, that way you could have a statement by them, some action and then some more dialogue without confusing the readers as to who is speaking.
Just some advice. But otherwise, super cute chapter. He just wants to tap that ;)
-AJ
9/19/2008 c5 42Takersgurl35
John needs to be up on that, all this subtle flirting is making me nuts, they're perfect for each other and he's so protective of her. Great chapter.
42Takersgurl35John needs to be up on that, all this subtle flirting is making me nuts, they're perfect for each other and he's so protective of her. Great chapter.
9/19/2008 c5 12Jewelgirl04
Only you, Miss Brittany, could take the word "whore" and make it a joke. SERIOuSLY.
Loved the chapter, too cute. PMS! I miss you girly!
12Jewelgirl04Only you, Miss Brittany, could take the word "whore" and make it a joke. SERIOuSLY.
Loved the chapter, too cute. PMS! I miss you girly!
9/18/2008 c5 NoLongerAFanfictionReader
love it so much! like seriously, i just read it and i'm gonna go read it again! update
love it so much! like seriously, i just read it and i'm gonna go read it again! update