for The Last Brother6/20/2012 c1 
5Consume
Your Hermione is way out of character. The real Hermione is a very humble person, she doesn't accept large things except when they are insisted upon. She is not like your average 15 year old who squeals and says sentences that are strung together to make her sound like a five year old. Hermione has has more dryer and intelligent humour, that circles around sarcasm.
I like your story plot but it needs some major editing.
5ConsumeYour Hermione is way out of character. The real Hermione is a very humble person, she doesn't accept large things except when they are insisted upon. She is not like your average 15 year old who squeals and says sentences that are strung together to make her sound like a five year old. Hermione has has more dryer and intelligent humour, that circles around sarcasm.
I like your story plot but it needs some major editing.
3/31/2012 c1 Mila Pink
Surprise? Do not think!
You find out how their parents are not who they should be.
Stranger in the least.
kisses
Surprise? Do not think!
You find out how their parents are not who they should be.
Stranger in the least.
kisses
5/27/2011 c11 Laurenmk20
Awwww, UPDATE! haha, I think that the two death eaters, were two of their brothers...*nods* Weather they're safe or not...I don't know. I just can't think of who else it could be, unless there's someone else out there who knows how to get to the manor.
Awwww, UPDATE! haha, I think that the two death eaters, were two of their brothers...*nods* Weather they're safe or not...I don't know. I just can't think of who else it could be, unless there's someone else out there who knows how to get to the manor.
6/18/2010 c11 11FraeElford
Oooh cliffy! Please write more,, lovin' the description of Draco and Hermione- er Jake and Cameron, :) Their teasing always did seem kinda sibling-ish (minus the mudblood bits :)) Really enjoyed it keep it up x LPPB
11FraeElfordOooh cliffy! Please write more,, lovin' the description of Draco and Hermione- er Jake and Cameron, :) Their teasing always did seem kinda sibling-ish (minus the mudblood bits :)) Really enjoyed it keep it up x LPPB
4/10/2010 c3 ireadfanfic
"Don't ask me how that all managed to fit on one ring, it just did." was funny xD.
Anw, I really think you should use " rather than ' for conversations. It's much easier to read that way.
"Don't ask me how that all managed to fit on one ring, it just did." was funny xD.
Anw, I really think you should use " rather than ' for conversations. It's much easier to read that way.
4/10/2010 c1 ireadfanfic
OMG this is really brilliant.. I mean how Hermione finds out and how she reacts. Quite a lot Hermione-was-adopted story is quite heartless ..
The rubber duck part was hilarious xD.
OMG this is really brilliant.. I mean how Hermione finds out and how she reacts. Quite a lot Hermione-was-adopted story is quite heartless ..
The rubber duck part was hilarious xD.
2/27/2010 c11 9physics chick
ugh, i hate it when hermione's name is changed. it's ok though, this is the best story i've seen that's done that and not ruined everything.
9physics chickugh, i hate it when hermione's name is changed. it's ok though, this is the best story i've seen that's done that and not ruined everything.
2/27/2010 c8 physics chick
GAHH no! i hate stories where hermione finds out she's not who she thinks she is and then has everything about her changed!
GAHH no! i hate stories where hermione finds out she's not who she thinks she is and then has everything about her changed!
2/27/2010 c7 physics chick
but didn't hermione just barely turn sixteen?
how can she have gone to school with draco for seven years?
but didn't hermione just barely turn sixteen?
how can she have gone to school with draco for seven years?
2/27/2010 c1 physics chick
interesting...why a rubber duck? oh yeah, it hit you in the shower, that explains things.
interesting...why a rubber duck? oh yeah, it hit you in the shower, that explains things.