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4/22/2010 c1 8Itanu
Hey, Writer's Blah!

Sorry for not getting to this earlier. I really should have.

Great job on your spelling and your grammar! It's perfect, as far as I can see.

I must say, I truly find this to be very touching. I could definitely see all of this being what rushes through Shadow's mind as he falls to Earth. I personally find one of the most profound effects here to be your vocabulary usage. It's very vibrant, and cooperates with Shadow's 'final' thoughts to bring a story we're already familiar with to life once more, and in a unique way.

In short, great story, beginning to end! Keep up the good work!

Until next time, Writer's Blah!

Signed with Humility,

Itanu the Author.
5/3/2008 c1 23Still Bullet
That was actually pretty damn impressive. I love your writing style; it contains such detail and a wide range of vocabulary. I can easily imagine Shadow thinking those exact words in the game, and you did a perfect job with the characterization.

The only problem I have is that I don't exactly think of Shadow as a robot, but that's just me.

Other than that, amazing work!
4/30/2008 c1 RODDY
WOW! This is one awesome story. This truly has the makings of a great body of work. You will truly be one of the greatest writers.

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