for Almost Dead4/22/2010 c1 
8Itanu
Hey, Writer's Blah!
Sorry for not getting to this earlier. I really should have.
Great job on your spelling and your grammar! It's perfect, as far as I can see.
I must say, I truly find this to be very touching. I could definitely see all of this being what rushes through Shadow's mind as he falls to Earth. I personally find one of the most profound effects here to be your vocabulary usage. It's very vibrant, and cooperates with Shadow's 'final' thoughts to bring a story we're already familiar with to life once more, and in a unique way.
In short, great story, beginning to end! Keep up the good work!
Until next time, Writer's Blah!
Signed with Humility,
Itanu the Author.
8ItanuHey, Writer's Blah!
Sorry for not getting to this earlier. I really should have.
Great job on your spelling and your grammar! It's perfect, as far as I can see.
I must say, I truly find this to be very touching. I could definitely see all of this being what rushes through Shadow's mind as he falls to Earth. I personally find one of the most profound effects here to be your vocabulary usage. It's very vibrant, and cooperates with Shadow's 'final' thoughts to bring a story we're already familiar with to life once more, and in a unique way.
In short, great story, beginning to end! Keep up the good work!
Until next time, Writer's Blah!
Signed with Humility,
Itanu the Author.
5/3/2008 c1 23Still Bullet
That was actually pretty damn impressive. I love your writing style; it contains such detail and a wide range of vocabulary. I can easily imagine Shadow thinking those exact words in the game, and you did a perfect job with the characterization.
The only problem I have is that I don't exactly think of Shadow as a robot, but that's just me.
Other than that, amazing work!
23Still BulletThat was actually pretty damn impressive. I love your writing style; it contains such detail and a wide range of vocabulary. I can easily imagine Shadow thinking those exact words in the game, and you did a perfect job with the characterization.
The only problem I have is that I don't exactly think of Shadow as a robot, but that's just me.
Other than that, amazing work!
4/30/2008 c1 RODDY
WOW! This is one awesome story. This truly has the makings of a great body of work. You will truly be one of the greatest writers.
WOW! This is one awesome story. This truly has the makings of a great body of work. You will truly be one of the greatest writers.