for EVOLUTION: a Ron Stoppable story11/26/2015 c2 Spirit Of The Black Wolf
Sad that it was never finished there's probably no hope for it to be completed now very sad but it a good story
Sad that it was never finished there's probably no hope for it to be completed now very sad but it a good story
9/11/2013 c1 
1KingLoitl
umm.. are u trying to write a STORY or are u writing a play/drama ? Cuz a STORY/NOVEL is written with paragraphs and grammer...
1KingLoitlumm.. are u trying to write a STORY or are u writing a play/drama ? Cuz a STORY/NOVEL is written with paragraphs and grammer...
8/2/2011 c2 isom
1: update damn it!
2: is ron going to get a new power in the next chapter? if he is it's going to involve the lotus blade or something else from DMC isn't it?
3: when is Johnny ging to reveal himself as Naruto?
4: will somebody please knock some sense into Kim already? i mean reallly someone get this girl to wake up and smell the coffee Josh isn't that great. if htey do break up thogh make it so he cheated on her so she not only feels like a fool, but hjosh get's his ass kicked.
1: update damn it!
2: is ron going to get a new power in the next chapter? if he is it's going to involve the lotus blade or something else from DMC isn't it?
3: when is Johnny ging to reveal himself as Naruto?
4: will somebody please knock some sense into Kim already? i mean reallly someone get this girl to wake up and smell the coffee Josh isn't that great. if htey do break up thogh make it so he cheated on her so she not only feels like a fool, but hjosh get's his ass kicked.
7/6/2011 c2 Isom
Johnny is so Naruto. Nice play with the Devil May Cry crossover. Do you think while at yamanouchi you can give Johnny rebellion, Yamato, Sparda, or Red Queen. Or give him something from kamen rider.
Johnny is so Naruto. Nice play with the Devil May Cry crossover. Do you think while at yamanouchi you can give Johnny rebellion, Yamato, Sparda, or Red Queen. Or give him something from kamen rider.
7/6/2011 c2 Isom
Johnny is so Naruto. Nice play with the Devil May Cry crossover. Do you think while at yamanouchi you can give Johnny rebellion, Yamato, Sparda, or Red Queen. Or give him something from kamen rider.
Johnny is so Naruto. Nice play with the Devil May Cry crossover. Do you think while at yamanouchi you can give Johnny rebellion, Yamato, Sparda, or Red Queen. Or give him something from kamen rider.
7/6/2011 c2 Isom
Johnny is so Naruto. Nice play with the Devil May Cry crossover. Do you think while at yamanouchi you can give Johnny rebellion, Yamato, Sparda, or Red Queen. Or give him something from kamen rider.
Johnny is so Naruto. Nice play with the Devil May Cry crossover. Do you think while at yamanouchi you can give Johnny rebellion, Yamato, Sparda, or Red Queen. Or give him something from kamen rider.
1/22/2011 c1 Juicedmark
wow great story so far. in the future u should probally get a betareader to help find some of the mistakes u might make. also please continue!
wow great story so far. in the future u should probally get a betareader to help find some of the mistakes u might make. also please continue!
12/21/2010 c2 vase
centering the story makes it hard, like the Bonnie pairing, you should research Jewish religion a little more also.
centering the story makes it hard, like the Bonnie pairing, you should research Jewish religion a little more also.
3/11/2009 c2 keth1
You really made Kim the bad guy in this story.Hopefully later she'll realize her misdeeds and control problems.
I do like Bonnie and Ron in this story.They would make a great couple.It's more Ron need to get over the food chain.
Actually about that Jewish marking they're body is a sin.Only if the person willing doing it to himself, that makes it wrong.But it's still wrong what Kim did which was against his fate.
You really made Kim the bad guy in this story.Hopefully later she'll realize her misdeeds and control problems.
I do like Bonnie and Ron in this story.They would make a great couple.It's more Ron need to get over the food chain.
Actually about that Jewish marking they're body is a sin.Only if the person willing doing it to himself, that makes it wrong.But it's still wrong what Kim did which was against his fate.
3/8/2009 c2 7Negi Atsui
Though it needs editing, I'm loving the story and am used to the way it's made. It's good!
7Negi AtsuiThough it needs editing, I'm loving the story and am used to the way it's made. It's good!
2/19/2009 c2 Sportsman
Looks like everyone is turning against Kim. How awful ... not! With friends like her, who needs enemies? Not Ron, that's for sure.
You know, I wonder ... what would happen if Kim were to turn evil as a result of all this? That would be something to see.
Looks like everyone is turning against Kim. How awful ... not! With friends like her, who needs enemies? Not Ron, that's for sure.
You know, I wonder ... what would happen if Kim were to turn evil as a result of all this? That would be something to see.
2/19/2009 c2 26Sentinel103
This was very hard to read, I suggest that you change your format style, I suggest you get a beta reader, I suggest that you read again some of the stuff that they made you in high school. YOu know literature. See how author who get paid to write do it.
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26Sentinel103This was very hard to read, I suggest that you change your format style, I suggest you get a beta reader, I suggest that you read again some of the stuff that they made you in high school. YOu know literature. See how author who get paid to write do it.
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