for Spy Against Spy11/16/2008 c3 
1xSapphirexRosesxFanx
nice... so, how do they fall in love with each other?
please update soon!
please!
1xSapphirexRosesxFanxnice... so, how do they fall in love with each other?
please update soon!
please!
7/2/2008 c3 5MikoKagome1113
MUCH better! The layout of the obsticle course was fantastic! Not rushed at all! The conversation wasn't bad either. Major improvement!
~Miko
5MikoKagome1113MUCH better! The layout of the obsticle course was fantastic! Not rushed at all! The conversation wasn't bad either. Major improvement!
~Miko
7/2/2008 c2 MikoKagome1113
This chapter was much more descriptive, but i crave massive amounts of conversation! the narration is great, but the narration is telling everything, and there is no longer anything to talk about! Try putting in conversation with tomoyo and sakura. Perhaps a "good job" or "you could have done that faster sakura!" maybe even throw some sarcastic remarks? Anything in conversation is good!
~Miko
This chapter was much more descriptive, but i crave massive amounts of conversation! the narration is great, but the narration is telling everything, and there is no longer anything to talk about! Try putting in conversation with tomoyo and sakura. Perhaps a "good job" or "you could have done that faster sakura!" maybe even throw some sarcastic remarks? Anything in conversation is good!
~Miko
7/2/2008 c1 MikoKagome1113
This one lacked a lot of detail as well. All of the information here could be more described in three very large chapters. you could explain how the two girls met, how they became great friends, how they had to beg to become new sisters, how they went through rigorous training to become spies, how they infiltrated the houshold of hiroshi, Azumi, and Masajun, or even how masajun wanted to cheat on tomoyo! It was all well and good, and im sure that you could have even densed it up to be vivid descriptions of sakura and tomoyo's past all in a prologue, but this has much more promise! Your ideas are astounding!
~Miko
This one lacked a lot of detail as well. All of the information here could be more described in three very large chapters. you could explain how the two girls met, how they became great friends, how they had to beg to become new sisters, how they went through rigorous training to become spies, how they infiltrated the houshold of hiroshi, Azumi, and Masajun, or even how masajun wanted to cheat on tomoyo! It was all well and good, and im sure that you could have even densed it up to be vivid descriptions of sakura and tomoyo's past all in a prologue, but this has much more promise! Your ideas are astounding!
~Miko
6/3/2008 c3 1Hirotsume-18
WOHO! so exciting! hehehe.. and cool! full of actions.. but i bet there's also romance? hehehe.. anyway.. PLEASE UPDATE! ONEGAI!
1Hirotsume-18WOHO! so exciting! hehehe.. and cool! full of actions.. but i bet there's also romance? hehehe.. anyway.. PLEASE UPDATE! ONEGAI!
6/1/2008 c3 3rosedreamer101
wow, kewl...i would had liked it better if you hadnt made everyone not know that they were the best spies.
3rosedreamer101wow, kewl...i would had liked it better if you hadnt made everyone not know that they were the best spies.
6/1/2008 c3 elfspirit7
AWESOME! Please update as soon as you can, can't wait to read the next chapter XD!
AWESOME! Please update as soon as you can, can't wait to read the next chapter XD!
5/14/2008 c1 Smoochynose
Ooh they've been manipulated. So sad that children are easy to fool into doing such things.
Ooh they've been manipulated. So sad that children are easy to fool into doing such things.