for Masks4/19/2017 c1 Guest
God, that is so sad and I'm so glad Naruto's in a better place now
You write that so well!
God, that is so sad and I'm so glad Naruto's in a better place now
You write that so well!
1/1/2017 c1 Ina Bauer
Ich liebe diese Geschichte. Ich wünschte nur du würdest weiter schreiben.
Dies FF hat großes Potential und du könntest sehr viel daraus machen.
Naruto weiß das er nicht lange leben wird, aber freut sich auf die Stadt in der er einfach leben kann ohne Angst haben zu müssen.
Ich liebe diese Geschichte. Ich wünschte nur du würdest weiter schreiben.
Dies FF hat großes Potential und du könntest sehr viel daraus machen.
Naruto weiß das er nicht lange leben wird, aber freut sich auf die Stadt in der er einfach leben kann ohne Angst haben zu müssen.
10/6/2012 c1 Guest
Can you write more ? I really like the idea of the Unwanted City. Ja Ne
Can you write more ? I really like the idea of the Unwanted City. Ja Ne
7/21/2012 c1 Ezra Scarlet
i love how much truth this story has.i love how naruto understands everything and simply decides,or accepts,that this is his reality.i could,if circumstances in the real naruto story were changed a bit,see how naruto would come to think and act like this,and so i thinkk that your fanfic is,in a way,true to the story,and i thank you for making it like ,and please continue to write more :)
i love how much truth this story has.i love how naruto understands everything and simply decides,or accepts,that this is his reality.i could,if circumstances in the real naruto story were changed a bit,see how naruto would come to think and act like this,and so i thinkk that your fanfic is,in a way,true to the story,and i thank you for making it like ,and please continue to write more :)
6/15/2012 c1 Domina Titania
I love it, its sad, happy, and true all at the same time. It's beautiful, perfect.
I love it, its sad, happy, and true all at the same time. It's beautiful, perfect.
12/15/2011 c1 
5traviswj
It did make sense, a lot of sense. Your stories capture a mood, and a moment, and lay it out on the page so well, its like a little masterpiece. Never stop writing.
5traviswjIt did make sense, a lot of sense. Your stories capture a mood, and a moment, and lay it out on the page so well, its like a little masterpiece. Never stop writing.
1/2/2010 c1 Mumiah
Somewhere, I'd like to think of the Unwanted City as of Avalon. I don't really know why, however.
( should learn how to write a review, really. It could be useful ^^ )
Somewhere, I'd like to think of the Unwanted City as of Avalon. I don't really know why, however.
( should learn how to write a review, really. It could be useful ^^ )
6/18/2009 c1 liseylivesforfantasy
that was really good. It did make sense although the story was very sad. Kakashi sensei was mean and he was one of my favorite characters from the manga
that was really good. It did make sense although the story was very sad. Kakashi sensei was mean and he was one of my favorite characters from the manga
3/11/2009 c1 4anemix
That was different. It's so sad and everyone just gave up, even Kyuubi.
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BUNNY
4anemixThat was different. It's so sad and everyone just gave up, even Kyuubi.
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c(")(")
BUNNY
2/28/2009 c1 ShadowFoxKage
This story does make sense in this different take on how Naruto's life could be interpreted.
If you ever decide to do a followup second chapter you could have it be how his leaving Konoha affected everyone else. First off Naruto's opinions that he told Gai. How team 7 no longer helps Sakura and Sasuke since there are no 2 man + Jounin cells.
This story does make sense in this different take on how Naruto's life could be interpreted.
If you ever decide to do a followup second chapter you could have it be how his leaving Konoha affected everyone else. First off Naruto's opinions that he told Gai. How team 7 no longer helps Sakura and Sasuke since there are no 2 man + Jounin cells.
6/2/2008 c1 4Jessie Bishop
sorry I can not offer any real criticism. I am not a writer and I love you fics. Your ideas are fresh new spins on Naruto. thanks for sharing them
4Jessie Bishopsorry I can not offer any real criticism. I am not a writer and I love you fics. Your ideas are fresh new spins on Naruto. thanks for sharing them