for Gomen Nasai Tomodachi12/30/2010 c1 Kassy
I think it ok but I like more of a fighting scene
I think it ok but I like more of a fighting scene
5/29/2008 c1 
2Ranma201
I think you should write it go on go for it!
let me know when you do it sounds really good.
Read my story called why.
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2Ranma201I think you should write it go on go for it!
let me know when you do it sounds really good.
Read my story called why.
=]
5/27/2008 c1 2Ruler of Fanfiction
Interesting...Very interesting...Now, I just hope you'll contine this in a way that makes it enjoyable for me. For example (No, I am not trying to dictate what you should do)the whole red pearl given to Ayumi could cause some strife.
And I have a question: Will you be continuing from the point where the summary ends, or start from the very beginning?
2Ruler of FanfictionInteresting...Very interesting...Now, I just hope you'll contine this in a way that makes it enjoyable for me. For example (No, I am not trying to dictate what you should do)the whole red pearl given to Ayumi could cause some strife.
And I have a question: Will you be continuing from the point where the summary ends, or start from the very beginning?
5/27/2008 c1 3PinkAngelWings
wow this is really amzing! is the summary what happened befor the actual story takes place? well good... no great.. naw SPECTACULAR for a first writing. update plz! *must fav this*
3PinkAngelWingswow this is really amzing! is the summary what happened befor the actual story takes place? well good... no great.. naw SPECTACULAR for a first writing. update plz! *must fav this*
5/27/2008 c1 15Pseudonym Jareth
Hey! This isn't that bad! Alright, there are somethings. First, are you the narrator or someone? You need to classify your person. Second, it is a little confusing while I'm trying to read, like a space between the sentences would be good, but single spacing would make it look connected. Overall, its alright for a first.
Rain
15Pseudonym JarethHey! This isn't that bad! Alright, there are somethings. First, are you the narrator or someone? You need to classify your person. Second, it is a little confusing while I'm trying to read, like a space between the sentences would be good, but single spacing would make it look connected. Overall, its alright for a first.
Rain