for No Chance for Fate11/10/2022 c13 Stary Wylk
So when do Setsuna and the old bitch get turned into boys?
So when do Setsuna and the old bitch get turned into boys?
5/17/2022 c2 Guest
Huh. So the mysterious timeline changes to the Amazon village didn't fully derail things there... Whatever they were, when mentioned last chapter.
Huh. So the mysterious timeline changes to the Amazon village didn't fully derail things there... Whatever they were, when mentioned last chapter.
1/31/2022 c2 
2AvidReader2425
There are some definite sentence structure and grammar issues throughout, the dialogue needs a little bit of work here and there, and the truck incident was a bit contrived considering the level of strength and training he should have even at this point. Interesting concept, but overall I have to say not my cup of tea. Though I hope others enjoy the story.
2AvidReader2425There are some definite sentence structure and grammar issues throughout, the dialogue needs a little bit of work here and there, and the truck incident was a bit contrived considering the level of strength and training he should have even at this point. Interesting concept, but overall I have to say not my cup of tea. Though I hope others enjoy the story.
1/31/2022 c1 AvidReader2425
Really interesting starting chapter, I don’t know much about Sailor Moon lol, but curious how things will develop.
Really interesting starting chapter, I don’t know much about Sailor Moon lol, but curious how things will develop.
8/10/2021 c18 Stary Wylk
Mostly well written, but you're not Tolstoi.
Mostly well written, but you're not Tolstoi.
7/12/2021 c18 Guest
...I just wanna read about the cool worldbuilding but the author keeps trying to make me read softcore porn...
...I just wanna read about the cool worldbuilding but the author keeps trying to make me read softcore porn...
7/12/2021 c16 Guest
I’d recommend maybe bumping up the rating to M, given the...pretty detailed description of them masturbating.
I’d recommend maybe bumping up the rating to M, given the...pretty detailed description of them masturbating.
7/12/2021 c13 5074
Interesting stuff. By portraying both series in a serious and realistic manner, you’ve taken away an inherent aspect that made the originals the originals, but you seem aware of that and willing to explore the freedom it gives you.
Still, never forget that a darker, realistic take on something light-hearted is a double-edged sword. Sure, it lets us examine something familiar in a new light, but by doing so, the creator risks losing something vital to the original.
I’ve seen far too many fanfic authors fall into that trap, moving so far from the tone of the source material that they lost the thing that drew us into these worlds in the first place.
This may seem mostly negative, but really, this is good stuff, I really enjoy it. Just...never forget your roots, ok?
(Oh, also I kinda feel like you could stand to tone down the horny stuff a bit. This isn’t so much an actual critique as it is just my opinion, but some of this was...a little uncomfortable to read.)
Interesting stuff. By portraying both series in a serious and realistic manner, you’ve taken away an inherent aspect that made the originals the originals, but you seem aware of that and willing to explore the freedom it gives you.
Still, never forget that a darker, realistic take on something light-hearted is a double-edged sword. Sure, it lets us examine something familiar in a new light, but by doing so, the creator risks losing something vital to the original.
I’ve seen far too many fanfic authors fall into that trap, moving so far from the tone of the source material that they lost the thing that drew us into these worlds in the first place.
This may seem mostly negative, but really, this is good stuff, I really enjoy it. Just...never forget your roots, ok?
(Oh, also I kinda feel like you could stand to tone down the horny stuff a bit. This isn’t so much an actual critique as it is just my opinion, but some of this was...a little uncomfortable to read.)
7/8/2021 c3 Anthony Dazet Ne
That was a very fascinating story!
That was a very fascinating story!