for The Shock Of a Lifetime11/1/2016 c1 Guest
Pretty long to have it in only one chapter, and your format makes it very hard to follow.
Pretty long to have it in only one chapter, and your format makes it very hard to follow.
3/8/2010 c1 
3Sailor-Scout-of-Darkness
This was good. I just wanted to tell you though, and I hope you don't think I'm being rude, but a commissary is a place on a military base that has a grocery store, a clothing store, and a bunch of little food shops and other little stores inside of it. I'm assuming that you mean chow hall, so it didn't really bother me, but I just wanted you to know. Please don't think I'm being rude.
3Sailor-Scout-of-DarknessThis was good. I just wanted to tell you though, and I hope you don't think I'm being rude, but a commissary is a place on a military base that has a grocery store, a clothing store, and a bunch of little food shops and other little stores inside of it. I'm assuming that you mean chow hall, so it didn't really bother me, but I just wanted you to know. Please don't think I'm being rude.
12/30/2009 c1 9quibilah
Ohh, I love this story as well! I really like the tension, angst, and romance parts in here. Very well done, and can't wait to read other stories. Excellent job, really liked Janet trying to get Carter to go with her and having to shout the information to everyone that was in the vicinity at the time, I laughed because I got it from the first time that she got sick, but once again I LOVED IT!
~Quibilah
9quibilahOhh, I love this story as well! I really like the tension, angst, and romance parts in here. Very well done, and can't wait to read other stories. Excellent job, really liked Janet trying to get Carter to go with her and having to shout the information to everyone that was in the vicinity at the time, I laughed because I got it from the first time that she got sick, but once again I LOVED IT!
~Quibilah
12/9/2009 c1 6Hazmatt
Amazing story! I really enjoyed it! I hope you write a sequal! The ending was brilliant and very cute!
6HazmattAmazing story! I really enjoyed it! I hope you write a sequal! The ending was brilliant and very cute!
7/23/2009 c1 pamdill
Enjoyed the story, presume as I have only found it a year after you wrote it that it is too late for a sequel?
Enjoyed the story, presume as I have only found it a year after you wrote it that it is too late for a sequel?
6/7/2008 c1 Nela Richards
Hey, it sounds nice, but it is too difficult to read; it just misses comma's, semicolon's etc..
I saw someone offered to beta it for you. You should!
Once it's beta'ed, I'd like to read the story...!
Hey, it sounds nice, but it is too difficult to read; it just misses comma's, semicolon's etc..
I saw someone offered to beta it for you. You should!
Once it's beta'ed, I'd like to read the story...!
6/1/2008 c1 86ValaMagic
Hey, i liked your story, but (yes, there's a but) it's really long so i think it would be better as a multi-chapter thing and the format is also difficult to follow. I think it would really benefit from being betaed. If you like i would be happy to do it and offer advice about dividing it into chapters if you like.
86ValaMagicHey, i liked your story, but (yes, there's a but) it's really long so i think it would be better as a multi-chapter thing and the format is also difficult to follow. I think it would really benefit from being betaed. If you like i would be happy to do it and offer advice about dividing it into chapters if you like.