for Indian Interlude6/20/2008 c5 
3allaboutcontests
I really love Jack in this fic, very in character I think. Him and the kids really crack me up, so cute!
Looking forward to reading more.
3allaboutcontestsI really love Jack in this fic, very in character I think. Him and the kids really crack me up, so cute!
Looking forward to reading more.
6/19/2008 c5 Jackless
Poor Mat, another soul to weigh Jack down. A wonderful bit of excitement. I do love action Jack! More please.
Poor Mat, another soul to weigh Jack down. A wonderful bit of excitement. I do love action Jack! More please.
6/19/2008 c5 Nessie1701
Wow! So very exciting... The tribe will finally see the deadly Jack we know and love. So sad about the death of "Matt"... Love it!
Wow! So very exciting... The tribe will finally see the deadly Jack we know and love. So sad about the death of "Matt"... Love it!
6/19/2008 c5 17Kedd
Hello - I actually quite enjoy the changing time frames; it makes for a more interesting narrative...
I loved this chapter - it really encompasses all aspects of Jack: his behaviour with the children, hints of his relationship with his team, his war experience, and his training as a deadly soldier. I thought the moment where he realizes he's stopped viewing all the villagers as enemies quite telling, and the action sequence at the end was well-written. Can't wait for the next one!
17KeddHello - I actually quite enjoy the changing time frames; it makes for a more interesting narrative...
I loved this chapter - it really encompasses all aspects of Jack: his behaviour with the children, hints of his relationship with his team, his war experience, and his training as a deadly soldier. I thought the moment where he realizes he's stopped viewing all the villagers as enemies quite telling, and the action sequence at the end was well-written. Can't wait for the next one!
6/19/2008 c5 70ScruffyLovin
There's our warrior Jack! :) But the kid...how sad. :( And um, I noticed that half way through the chapter Little Step's name is changed to 'Small Steps', or is that referring to someone else?
70ScruffyLovinThere's our warrior Jack! :) But the kid...how sad. :( And um, I noticed that half way through the chapter Little Step's name is changed to 'Small Steps', or is that referring to someone else?
6/19/2008 c5 gibblesgal
A truly captivating chapter. First you have Jack, the mild-mannered berry picker and rugrat sitter, then finish with a warrior out for revenge against the enemy of his enemy. Excellent!
A truly captivating chapter. First you have Jack, the mild-mannered berry picker and rugrat sitter, then finish with a warrior out for revenge against the enemy of his enemy. Excellent!
6/19/2008 c4 gibblesgal
Well, it looks like Jack has a new following in the shape of a pint-sized rugrat. The interactions you described between the two were priceless.
Leave it to Teal'c to put Daniel in his place. His tantrums over things not going his way in regard to the search for Jack were not fair to General Hammond or to Sam. Certainly, he should realize that Sam can only do so much without getting herself in trouble, but he just seemed to miss the whole point in the matter. Hammond was already doing everything he could. Daniel should have some faith.
I just wonder if by chance that Jack has been claimed as a mate. Could that be the case if he is the servant of Little Step? I am anxious to see if I'm on the right track. I'll wait right here for the next chapter.
Well, it looks like Jack has a new following in the shape of a pint-sized rugrat. The interactions you described between the two were priceless.
Leave it to Teal'c to put Daniel in his place. His tantrums over things not going his way in regard to the search for Jack were not fair to General Hammond or to Sam. Certainly, he should realize that Sam can only do so much without getting herself in trouble, but he just seemed to miss the whole point in the matter. Hammond was already doing everything he could. Daniel should have some faith.
I just wonder if by chance that Jack has been claimed as a mate. Could that be the case if he is the servant of Little Step? I am anxious to see if I'm on the right track. I'll wait right here for the next chapter.
6/19/2008 c5 10PatriciaS
Love the way this story is going especially as it shows the different sides of Jack as he's willing to wait his time for escape and now he's the warrior protecting the people who took against their enemies and I reckon the boy's father knew he would when he left them.
I also like the way you jump between times makes me ponder about the story especially as you are bring in SGC as well.
Thanks for taking the time and sharing looking forward to the next chapter.
10PatriciaSLove the way this story is going especially as it shows the different sides of Jack as he's willing to wait his time for escape and now he's the warrior protecting the people who took against their enemies and I reckon the boy's father knew he would when he left them.
I also like the way you jump between times makes me ponder about the story especially as you are bring in SGC as well.
Thanks for taking the time and sharing looking forward to the next chapter.
6/17/2008 c4 Jackless
You give so much and yet so little. Just enough to keep me coming back but not enough to let us know what's going on. I love a good Jack mystary. Keep those chapters coming.
You give so much and yet so little. Just enough to keep me coming back but not enough to let us know what's going on. I love a good Jack mystary. Keep those chapters coming.
6/17/2008 c4 12avidgokufan
I'm enjoying the direction this story is going. Please continue soon. Thank you for the quick updates. I enjoy the reactions of those at the SGC. Thank you for writing quality chapters.
12avidgokufanI'm enjoying the direction this story is going. Please continue soon. Thank you for the quick updates. I enjoy the reactions of those at the SGC. Thank you for writing quality chapters.
6/17/2008 c4 17Kedd
Just wanted to let you know how much I've been enjoying this story; I especially liked this chapter with the further insight into what's happening at the SGC, although I can't wait to find out what exactly is going on on that planet! Also, you write a really good Jack - especially in this chapter, his combination of an inability to hurt or disappoint the children, his internal agony provoked by their prescence, his embarrassment at being rewarded for saving the boy, and his response to captivity have all rung true for me. Can't wait for more!
17KeddJust wanted to let you know how much I've been enjoying this story; I especially liked this chapter with the further insight into what's happening at the SGC, although I can't wait to find out what exactly is going on on that planet! Also, you write a really good Jack - especially in this chapter, his combination of an inability to hurt or disappoint the children, his internal agony provoked by their prescence, his embarrassment at being rewarded for saving the boy, and his response to captivity have all rung true for me. Can't wait for more!
6/17/2008 c4 70ScruffyLovin
Hehe. Poor Jack, he gets so bashful when put in the center of attention. :)
Daniel really was acting like a child, and I'm glad Teal'c more or less put him in his place.
The part where Jack was stuck with the little girl made me laugh, too. :D
70ScruffyLovinHehe. Poor Jack, he gets so bashful when put in the center of attention. :)
Daniel really was acting like a child, and I'm glad Teal'c more or less put him in his place.
The part where Jack was stuck with the little girl made me laugh, too. :D
6/16/2008 c3 gibblesgal
So typical Jack, putting everyone, especially children, in front of his own well-being. I guess that a fur and getting to sleep inside would be considered a just payment for saving the life of a child of a people that hold him captive.
At the point that he discovered that they were on the other side of the river and the other Indians were only then responding to the scene, I thought for sure that you were going to have this rescuee child be so terrified that he couldn't or wouldn't back Jack up as to why he was on the wrong side of the river. I'm thinking, oh no, Jack is so going to get it. This kid was probably not supposed to be where he was and he wouldn't own up to his wrongdoing for fear of being punished. Jack would be left without an alibi for his swim to the other side of the river. Thankfully, this wasn't the case.
Then you go and make me think that Jack went ahead with an escape plan and was caught again, being beaten within an inch of his life for punishment, but due to his heroics with the child is left alive. He is being cared for by a yet unnamed person and is so out of it he can't bring himself to resurface to reality.
But, before this happens, he befriends a number of the children by teaching them to skip pebbles. They even exchange names. OK, has he been won over or is it all a bad dream?
This is such a thinker of a story. You have to really pay attention to know what time period it is. I find myself reading slowly to gain all the details. It's totally facinating.
So typical Jack, putting everyone, especially children, in front of his own well-being. I guess that a fur and getting to sleep inside would be considered a just payment for saving the life of a child of a people that hold him captive.
At the point that he discovered that they were on the other side of the river and the other Indians were only then responding to the scene, I thought for sure that you were going to have this rescuee child be so terrified that he couldn't or wouldn't back Jack up as to why he was on the wrong side of the river. I'm thinking, oh no, Jack is so going to get it. This kid was probably not supposed to be where he was and he wouldn't own up to his wrongdoing for fear of being punished. Jack would be left without an alibi for his swim to the other side of the river. Thankfully, this wasn't the case.
Then you go and make me think that Jack went ahead with an escape plan and was caught again, being beaten within an inch of his life for punishment, but due to his heroics with the child is left alive. He is being cared for by a yet unnamed person and is so out of it he can't bring himself to resurface to reality.
But, before this happens, he befriends a number of the children by teaching them to skip pebbles. They even exchange names. OK, has he been won over or is it all a bad dream?
This is such a thinker of a story. You have to really pay attention to know what time period it is. I find myself reading slowly to gain all the details. It's totally facinating.