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6SonarTex43
You're trying to wedge in a Chronicles of Riddick aspect to this story, Just so you know, if you had paid attention to the movie lore of the Riddick series, you'd know the silver eyes he was known for, weren't genetic. They were the result of an elective surgery when Riddick was a kid.
There was only one other Furyan in the series, and he didn't have those eyes.
6SonarTex43You're trying to wedge in a Chronicles of Riddick aspect to this story, Just so you know, if you had paid attention to the movie lore of the Riddick series, you'd know the silver eyes he was known for, weren't genetic. They were the result of an elective surgery when Riddick was a kid.
There was only one other Furyan in the series, and he didn't have those eyes.
11/9/2023 c16 12MacMan3679
You really need to learn how to keep your continuity straight. You’ve already written that Naruto knows his Elemental Affinities, you mentioned him being extremely strong in water and wind. Kakashi has already tested him, you need to learn to keep the facts of your story straight.
12MacMan3679You really need to learn how to keep your continuity straight. You’ve already written that Naruto knows his Elemental Affinities, you mentioned him being extremely strong in water and wind. Kakashi has already tested him, you need to learn to keep the facts of your story straight.
8/14/2023 c2 potato
an average failure rate is not a guaranteed failure rate.
Nice job rehashing canon interactions in a decidedly uninspiring way.
Also. It's 'genin'. and 'hitai-ate'
an average failure rate is not a guaranteed failure rate.
Nice job rehashing canon interactions in a decidedly uninspiring way.
Also. It's 'genin'. and 'hitai-ate'
8/14/2023 c2 Guest
The all black ensemble is dumb as shit and a surefire way to tell people I'M AN OUTSIDER AVOID ME AT ALL COSTS
The all black ensemble is dumb as shit and a surefire way to tell people I'M AN OUTSIDER AVOID ME AT ALL COSTS
8/14/2023 c1 Guest
it's country's destruction, not countries. possessive is apostrophe s. plurals is ies (among others but you know what I'm getting at).
for example. Your policy's details. Your fancy's recitals. Your country's provinces.
it's country's destruction, not countries. possessive is apostrophe s. plurals is ies (among others but you know what I'm getting at).
for example. Your policy's details. Your fancy's recitals. Your country's provinces.
4/19/2023 c19 1Currahee506
morae soon please even filler chapter/episodes are important for char development and keeping us interested
1Currahee506morae soon please even filler chapter/episodes are important for char development and keeping us interested
12/22/2022 c7 ROBERT
why not had Naruto and his wife s had move to why was be the whirlpool lands he made a home when his made it like the lords had one only thing is the a full of bad guys stuff like swords and others stuff like cut off heads of foes he took out both ninjas and others too, when then his had made his bed room on the 1 floor and 2 part is living room and a books room , when then is 3 and 4 is when his had keeping some others stuff too, bust of men and women like , and past war ships and battle ships too, why not had him mix his body with the fox then his had mix his powers and life force with it now,
why not had Naruto and his wife s had move to why was be the whirlpool lands he made a home when his made it like the lords had one only thing is the a full of bad guys stuff like swords and others stuff like cut off heads of foes he took out both ninjas and others too, when then his had made his bed room on the 1 floor and 2 part is living room and a books room , when then is 3 and 4 is when his had keeping some others stuff too, bust of men and women like , and past war ships and battle ships too, why not had him mix his body with the fox then his had mix his powers and life force with it now,