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8/8/2008 c1 Charlie Louie
You should so write more! I love it, I want more, it amkes me sad that the story ends there, i want them to end up together! Please?

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8/1/2008 c1 18Bomba-Fae
Yeah it really needs to be edited. The grammar and spelling is not good in some parts. BUT I'll definitely give you credit and say that this was a very good attempt. You should write more stories and just make sure you edit them more. Good job.

Smiles,

Bomba
7/13/2008 c1 12missloaf94
Hey... this is really good! The only thing is, your grammar is a little bit everywhere.. maybe you should look into getting a beta? (someone who checks grammar, spelling, etc.) I'd be happy to do it, if you let me know in a PM or whatever... thanks!

CS

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7/13/2008 c1 Saru92
I really think you should have fixed all the spelling mistakes before you posted this. And you should also have tried to use this little sign more , , , , , , , , There's way too many long sentences...

But it's a really good story and if you decide to continue with it I'll be glad to read it :)

(If you try to work on your grammar, that is)

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