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9/26/2009 c1 4archerrylime
i'm not gping to flame you, but you can accept some advice, right? :)

please add some 'disclaimer' and 'warnings'.

Like: 'warning: dead chara.'...

i don't have any problem with that, but sometimes some readers and author-senpais will mention that in not-too-nice-way. i've seen many stories who got flame because of that. :)



i like how you describe the scene and characters, and there's no typos(as far as i can see) and for first story, this is GREAT! xD

but,

MORE please!

it's too short... x( i want to read more.

keep writing! xD

cherrylime.

P.S: i'm sorry if any of my word upsets you. :( IF any. i didn't mean to.
8/17/2009 c1 9CHIBI LOLLIPOP
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I like, Its so so SAD!

So sad...

Was that ENVY!

I don't know why, maybe it's cause winry was gone but I like this and I usually hate, I REPEATE Hate Winry/ED...

Oh well you should write so much more! I LOVE...

Don't mind the spelling
10/17/2008 c1 105Auto-Alchemechanicist
This was very nice! I liked it! Envy killed them right? I knew it! You did a good job here! I enjoyed it so much!

-Auto-Alchemechanicist-
7/22/2008 c1 21lostinthisnightmarecalledlife
OMG sierra... Love it...

Its so good.
7/16/2008 c1 5Senritsu131
I will not flame since it's angst but I really am flaming inside!

nice!

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