9/26/2009 c1 4archerrylime
i'm not gping to flame you, but you can accept some advice, right? :)
please add some 'disclaimer' and 'warnings'.
Like: 'warning: dead chara.'...
i don't have any problem with that, but sometimes some readers and author-senpais will mention that in not-too-nice-way. i've seen many stories who got flame because of that. :)
i like how you describe the scene and characters, and there's no typos(as far as i can see) and for first story, this is GREAT! xD
but,
MORE please!
it's too short... x( i want to read more.
keep writing! xD
cherrylime.
P.S: i'm sorry if any of my word upsets you. :( IF any. i didn't mean to.
i'm not gping to flame you, but you can accept some advice, right? :)
please add some 'disclaimer' and 'warnings'.
Like: 'warning: dead chara.'...
i don't have any problem with that, but sometimes some readers and author-senpais will mention that in not-too-nice-way. i've seen many stories who got flame because of that. :)
i like how you describe the scene and characters, and there's no typos(as far as i can see) and for first story, this is GREAT! xD
but,
MORE please!
it's too short... x( i want to read more.
keep writing! xD
cherrylime.
P.S: i'm sorry if any of my word upsets you. :( IF any. i didn't mean to.
8/17/2009 c1 9CHIBI LOLLIPOP
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I like, Its so so SAD!
So sad...
Was that ENVY!
I don't know why, maybe it's cause winry was gone but I like this and I usually hate, I REPEATE Hate Winry/ED...
Oh well you should write so much more! I LOVE...
Don't mind the spelling
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I like, Its so so SAD!
So sad...
Was that ENVY!
I don't know why, maybe it's cause winry was gone but I like this and I usually hate, I REPEATE Hate Winry/ED...
Oh well you should write so much more! I LOVE...
Don't mind the spelling
10/17/2008 c1 105Auto-Alchemechanicist
This was very nice! I liked it! Envy killed them right? I knew it! You did a good job here! I enjoyed it so much!
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This was very nice! I liked it! Envy killed them right? I knew it! You did a good job here! I enjoyed it so much!
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