for Foeseeker10/20/2008 c29 Martin the Warrior
It's a bit short an' confusin', but it's also GREAT!
I think you used the latin word 'Malus'. I also think you made it sound like 'malice'.
Anyway, it's great!
Martin the Warrior
It's a bit short an' confusin', but it's also GREAT!
I think you used the latin word 'Malus'. I also think you made it sound like 'malice'.
Anyway, it's great!
Martin the Warrior
10/19/2008 c29 
5Jade TeaLeaf
Oh poor Melanda, having to go through all of this. D: I wonder what these vermin's plans are... Anyways, I noticed one Latin word: Rexmor. I don't know what -mor means, but I do know that "rex" means royalty or something. Anyways, good job with creating a creepy, evil, yet also mysterious setting.
~Jade TeaLeaf
5Jade TeaLeafOh poor Melanda, having to go through all of this. D: I wonder what these vermin's plans are... Anyways, I noticed one Latin word: Rexmor. I don't know what -mor means, but I do know that "rex" means royalty or something. Anyways, good job with creating a creepy, evil, yet also mysterious setting.
~Jade TeaLeaf
10/18/2008 c28 Martin the Warrior
I don't think it's choppy! I think it's great! But, of course, authors are better at judging this kinda thing than me. :(
What exactly is Melanda lookin' for?
Is the place with all the carvings Brock'all?
Why does touchin' th' thing make her 'go out'?
What is this 'misterious treasure'?
Is Ranscon Triss' great-great grandfather or somethin'?
Why didn't Melanda recognise the name 'Rocc Arem if he was her great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-ect.-ect.-ect.-grandfadda ;) ?
Anyway, enough of my ceacless (is that spelled correctly?) questions.
The story's doin' awesome (so far). ;)
Martin the Warrior
I don't think it's choppy! I think it's great! But, of course, authors are better at judging this kinda thing than me. :(
What exactly is Melanda lookin' for?
Is the place with all the carvings Brock'all?
Why does touchin' th' thing make her 'go out'?
What is this 'misterious treasure'?
Is Ranscon Triss' great-great grandfather or somethin'?
Why didn't Melanda recognise the name 'Rocc Arem if he was her great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-ect.-ect.-ect.-grandfadda ;) ?
Anyway, enough of my ceacless (is that spelled correctly?) questions.
The story's doin' awesome (so far). ;)
Martin the Warrior
10/17/2008 c28 2fwirl of redwall
Gahh. A cliffhanger.D:
it was a fantastic chapter!:))and a really random comment: i like Flaxa's hare accents!
2fwirl of redwallGahh. A cliffhanger.D:
it was a fantastic chapter!:))and a really random comment: i like Flaxa's hare accents!
10/17/2008 c28 5Jade TeaLeaf
Not another cliffhanger! Well now I'm really wondering what's going to happen next. I liked your little excerpt from the Redwall Records and I liked how you sparked my curiosity with the cave paintings. I'm wondering if you're going to delve into "Mythology Mode" and talk about a time in forgotten history when everybeast got together but something went wrong and vermin became evil... or something like that. Can't wait to see what ideas you come up with next!
~Jade TeaLeaf
5Jade TeaLeafNot another cliffhanger! Well now I'm really wondering what's going to happen next. I liked your little excerpt from the Redwall Records and I liked how you sparked my curiosity with the cave paintings. I'm wondering if you're going to delve into "Mythology Mode" and talk about a time in forgotten history when everybeast got together but something went wrong and vermin became evil... or something like that. Can't wait to see what ideas you come up with next!
~Jade TeaLeaf
10/14/2008 c27 Martin the Warrior
Great, as usual!...:)...But to short for me. (Of course, EVERYTHING is to short for me.);)
I have been bugging you in my reviews about how long you take posting the chapters, & I'm sorry about that. It's just that...*whisper, whisper* "Personal info, doncha know."
By the way, I think you're doin' an awesome job on the harespeech, but you aren't putting in enough things like 'Bally' & 'Blinkin'' & 'Bloomin'' & 'Jolly' & 'ABSOBALLYLUTELY' & 'Wot wot'. But that's just my opinion.
Anyway, just as good as usual, & better! :)
Martin the Warrior
P.S. I really think you're doing well, although there are a few grammar mistakes, like
The hawk and watervole saluted for the dormitories,
SALUTED FOR THE DORMITORIES
It should be something like
The hawk and watervole saluted, then headed for the dormitories,
Anyway, you're doing a really good job! :D
Martin the Warrior (Again) ;)
Great, as usual!...:)...But to short for me. (Of course, EVERYTHING is to short for me.);)
I have been bugging you in my reviews about how long you take posting the chapters, & I'm sorry about that. It's just that...*whisper, whisper* "Personal info, doncha know."
By the way, I think you're doin' an awesome job on the harespeech, but you aren't putting in enough things like 'Bally' & 'Blinkin'' & 'Bloomin'' & 'Jolly' & 'ABSOBALLYLUTELY' & 'Wot wot'. But that's just my opinion.
Anyway, just as good as usual, & better! :)
Martin the Warrior
P.S. I really think you're doing well, although there are a few grammar mistakes, like
The hawk and watervole saluted for the dormitories,
SALUTED FOR THE DORMITORIES
It should be something like
The hawk and watervole saluted, then headed for the dormitories,
Anyway, you're doing a really good job! :D
Martin the Warrior (Again) ;)
10/13/2008 c27 34Scyphi
Ooh, I feel like I should recognize the name, but...
A quick search on Google (or better than that) would get me the answer, but I won't cheat. :)
34ScyphiOoh, I feel like I should recognize the name, but...
A quick search on Google (or better than that) would get me the answer, but I won't cheat. :)
10/12/2008 c27 12Twilarose
Wow. That's alot to take in. I'm really happy to see Tergan again. The Roc Arrem thing is cool too. By the way, Tam and Doogy are in the Northlands right? Do you think you could make them run into some old friends? Great chapter!
12TwilaroseWow. That's alot to take in. I'm really happy to see Tergan again. The Roc Arrem thing is cool too. By the way, Tam and Doogy are in the Northlands right? Do you think you could make them run into some old friends? Great chapter!
10/11/2008 c27 5Jade TeaLeaf
Nice chapter, and again, great job with the poetry and stuff. You did a good job of showing how Redwall's going through a tough time and I wonder who these vermin are...? Anyways, I hope you update quick so I can find out. ;)
~Jade TeaLeaf
5Jade TeaLeafNice chapter, and again, great job with the poetry and stuff. You did a good job of showing how Redwall's going through a tough time and I wonder who these vermin are...? Anyways, I hope you update quick so I can find out. ;)
~Jade TeaLeaf
10/11/2008 c27 30Adder of the Pit
Wait... TAM'S A DESCENDANT OF TRISS? THAT'S GENIUS!
...'Cept, how did Triss's descendants get to the Borderlands? Oh, forget it, it's a cool idea anyway! But it might have made more sense to have Rocc Arrem be on her mother's side, because Armel's from Redwall, and it would make her have warrior blood on both sides of her family, which would be epic.
30Adder of the PitWait... TAM'S A DESCENDANT OF TRISS? THAT'S GENIUS!
...'Cept, how did Triss's descendants get to the Borderlands? Oh, forget it, it's a cool idea anyway! But it might have made more sense to have Rocc Arrem be on her mother's side, because Armel's from Redwall, and it would make her have warrior blood on both sides of her family, which would be epic.
10/9/2008 c26 Martin the Warrior
Yay! A bit of Gareth for a change!:D (Don't worry, I still like Lin, but I was dyin' to get back to Gareth. He's my favorite character;)).
I also like the idea of lots of good vermin, although B.J. never puts that many in his books. :(
Yes, I think Whales are a great idea (sorry I'm not voting on the poll, I don't Know how to login), & the odd manner of speech is awesome!:D
Martin the Warrior
Yay! A bit of Gareth for a change!:D (Don't worry, I still like Lin, but I was dyin' to get back to Gareth. He's my favorite character;)).
I also like the idea of lots of good vermin, although B.J. never puts that many in his books. :(
Yes, I think Whales are a great idea (sorry I'm not voting on the poll, I don't Know how to login), & the odd manner of speech is awesome!:D
Martin the Warrior
10/7/2008 c26 12Twilarose
I'm really glad Gareth found some friends. I was really worried about him. Tippin sounds really cool. I like him already.
12TwilaroseI'm really glad Gareth found some friends. I was really worried about him. Tippin sounds really cool. I like him already.
10/6/2008 c26 2fwirl of redwall
hello
YAY he finally found friends.:) I like the vermin accents. update soon!
2fwirl of redwallhello
YAY he finally found friends.:) I like the vermin accents. update soon!