for Tastebuds7/12/2012 c1 
1Karepan
To categorise these three characters into taste "dimensions", I think you've done excellently.
1KarepanTo categorise these three characters into taste "dimensions", I think you've done excellently.
6/6/2009 c1 1Night's Spell
i found this story sweet. u've managed to capture each character's essence.
1Night's Spelli found this story sweet. u've managed to capture each character's essence.
1/3/2009 c1 39elliott ashes
Cool idea. Your summary caught my attention, and most of this was similarly well written. You've got some very powerful lines in this, such as the last sentence. I loved Haruko and Eri's sections, but the Mamimi one didn't seem as strong to me. It wasn't bad, but compared to the others it didn't stand out to me.
Regarding the formatting, I thought the bolding and italics were very well done. The paragraph set-up is pretty conventional, so you could experiment with that if you wanted, but overall the formatting didn't seem like it needed too much work done. There were a couple typos you might want to fix, though (you'll probably see them quickly if you look it over again, it seems like just a case of hitting the wrong button on the keyboard).
Interesting read, and I got a really good feel for Haruko and Eri's emotional states from it without anything having to be spelled out. Keep writing!
39elliott ashesCool idea. Your summary caught my attention, and most of this was similarly well written. You've got some very powerful lines in this, such as the last sentence. I loved Haruko and Eri's sections, but the Mamimi one didn't seem as strong to me. It wasn't bad, but compared to the others it didn't stand out to me.
Regarding the formatting, I thought the bolding and italics were very well done. The paragraph set-up is pretty conventional, so you could experiment with that if you wanted, but overall the formatting didn't seem like it needed too much work done. There were a couple typos you might want to fix, though (you'll probably see them quickly if you look it over again, it seems like just a case of hitting the wrong button on the keyboard).
Interesting read, and I got a really good feel for Haruko and Eri's emotional states from it without anything having to be spelled out. Keep writing!
9/18/2008 c1 Hijinx
I really liked this story and seeing how there was no review I thought it definately needed one. I'm not really one to review as I don't know much about writing. I did notice a few spelling mistakes but other than that it was great, I loved it.
I really liked this story and seeing how there was no review I thought it definately needed one. I'm not really one to review as I don't know much about writing. I did notice a few spelling mistakes but other than that it was great, I loved it.