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17Aspirare
*Favorites this story* I really enjoy this dystopian universe that you have created for yourself, and really, 'dystopian' is the correct word to use. Originally, the word "utopia" literally meant "no place," and came to also mean "unworkable." Here, you have created an entirely workable, believable universe that is so much fun to read. I wouldn't worry about characterization-you have one of the best "Lockdown" voices I have ever read; he fits the characterization of the show so well that I almost cannot separate 'your' Lockdown and 'their' Lockdown. You also do a wonderful job with Prowl, and their interactions are well constructed and believable. Their interactions, really, is what makes them such a fun pairing-they are different, alike, and have such wonderful chemistry. Again, good job, and I hope that you will keep writing short stories for this dystopian universe.
~Aspirare
17Aspirare*Favorites this story* I really enjoy this dystopian universe that you have created for yourself, and really, 'dystopian' is the correct word to use. Originally, the word "utopia" literally meant "no place," and came to also mean "unworkable." Here, you have created an entirely workable, believable universe that is so much fun to read. I wouldn't worry about characterization-you have one of the best "Lockdown" voices I have ever read; he fits the characterization of the show so well that I almost cannot separate 'your' Lockdown and 'their' Lockdown. You also do a wonderful job with Prowl, and their interactions are well constructed and believable. Their interactions, really, is what makes them such a fun pairing-they are different, alike, and have such wonderful chemistry. Again, good job, and I hope that you will keep writing short stories for this dystopian universe.
~Aspirare