for I Don't Give A5/30/2018 c6 Wasted
You wasted so much effort to get to this ending. It's too bad as you had much more potential. I suggest you use better plot devices and consider how people actually act around each other. Yes, we all suspend belief for a story like Naruto, but that only becomes possible if what we're reading is somewhat believable ... the less believable you're story is, the more craft you have to use to bring it to life. ~jsm
You wasted so much effort to get to this ending. It's too bad as you had much more potential. I suggest you use better plot devices and consider how people actually act around each other. Yes, we all suspend belief for a story like Naruto, but that only becomes possible if what we're reading is somewhat believable ... the less believable you're story is, the more craft you have to use to bring it to life. ~jsm
5/30/2018 c1 Reading a book
Reading a book? That's the best mechanism you could find to introduce the argument? Crap, you'd have done better to question his sexual orientation and let her rip on that ... but a book?! So stupid.
Reading a book? That's the best mechanism you could find to introduce the argument? Crap, you'd have done better to question his sexual orientation and let her rip on that ... but a book?! So stupid.
12/27/2016 c6 
80YeagerMeister31
well that was nice shame there was no lemon though would have ended it perfectly but oh well
80YeagerMeister31well that was nice shame there was no lemon though would have ended it perfectly but oh well
10/18/2014 c1 Iron Monkey Fist
OK, not a fan of Naruto screaming like a bitch, and the argument seems really dumb.
OK, not a fan of Naruto screaming like a bitch, and the argument seems really dumb.
5/8/2011 c5 Sigh
I doubt they would be able to take out naruto so easily.
I doubt they would be able to take out naruto so easily.
1/21/2009 c6 Ultraliscir
Hmm, well somehow I thought the story would be longer
Hmm, well somehow I thought the story would be longer