for This is my story12/21/2010 c6 luna
! i cant even think of something to write except u r a genuis and i love ur writing and hope to see it updated soon,plz
! i cant even think of something to write except u r a genuis and i love ur writing and hope to see it updated soon,plz
12/23/2009 c6 DAMN
DAMN PHANTOM FREAK! NO MORE ** NOTES! WHAT THE HELL? JUST FINISH THE DAMN STORY!
DAMN PHANTOM FREAK! NO MORE ** NOTES! WHAT THE HELL? JUST FINISH THE DAMN STORY!
5/29/2009 c1 monica Fabregas
that is so cool i want this book i cant wait to find out what happens OMG!
that is so cool i want this book i cant wait to find out what happens OMG!
5/24/2009 c4 
22Princess of Rose
Okay, I know I've reviewed before.
Just... some critique? i love giving out critiques.
your plot is good. it has some meaning, but I'm kind of confused. they were friends and screwed around... yeah, i get that, kind of like Juno. but Sam claims towards the beginning she doesn't rememebr that night, yet at the end she's the one who clarifies it? huh?
i already commented on the paternity test, no no further word on that.
your grammar is also a bit rocky. it's good in some places yet is kind of falling apart in others. please don't take offense in this- no story is perfect. mine are not. just... well, the offer to beta read is still up.
RenesmeeScarlet
22Princess of RoseOkay, I know I've reviewed before.
Just... some critique? i love giving out critiques.
your plot is good. it has some meaning, but I'm kind of confused. they were friends and screwed around... yeah, i get that, kind of like Juno. but Sam claims towards the beginning she doesn't rememebr that night, yet at the end she's the one who clarifies it? huh?
i already commented on the paternity test, no no further word on that.
your grammar is also a bit rocky. it's good in some places yet is kind of falling apart in others. please don't take offense in this- no story is perfect. mine are not. just... well, the offer to beta read is still up.
RenesmeeScarlet
5/23/2009 c4 RenesmeeScarlet
well, good, but a bit rushed. there were some grammar issues, but nothing absolutely awful. if you need a beta reader, i would be glad.
anyway, for paternity tests, they take blood.
please continue.
well, good, but a bit rushed. there were some grammar issues, but nothing absolutely awful. if you need a beta reader, i would be glad.
anyway, for paternity tests, they take blood.
please continue.
5/23/2009 c4 2that 1 flower child
That was beyond awesome... be-awesome! WOO! I'm so glad you posted the chapter... many people say that but they never post in like a year or two... YOU ROCK! And so does your story! Fan loves you too!
2that 1 flower childThat was beyond awesome... be-awesome! WOO! I'm so glad you posted the chapter... many people say that but they never post in like a year or two... YOU ROCK! And so does your story! Fan loves you too!
10/3/2008 c2 6TeeBlack
Interesting, the grammer is a little off, and I think it should be rated T for teens... but I'm not sure. Maybe not. Anyways, not bad.
Signed, AvatarAddict
6TeeBlackInteresting, the grammer is a little off, and I think it should be rated T for teens... but I'm not sure. Maybe not. Anyways, not bad.
Signed, AvatarAddict
9/29/2008 c2 15Magic713
Well can't say I didn't see this coming but I would really love to see more of this story.
15Magic713Well can't say I didn't see this coming but I would really love to see more of this story.
9/20/2008 c2 2that 1 flower child
hey when are you going to write the next chapter? e-mail me when you posted the next chapter here: okay? I need to know the rest!
2that 1 flower childhey when are you going to write the next chapter? e-mail me when you posted the next chapter here: okay? I need to know the rest!
9/17/2008 c2 22Princess of Rose
I honestly expected that...
But they weren't a couple! OMG!
Update!
Peace,
RenesmeeScarlet
22Princess of RoseI honestly expected that...
But they weren't a couple! OMG!
Update!
Peace,
RenesmeeScarlet
9/7/2008 c1 Princess of Rose
Uh oh, Sam.
Good story. You can do a lot with it, but you do need to fix your grammar. It isn't as bad as some of the stories on here, but I am a grammar Nazi. And you spelled 'board' wrong. It's bored.
Please update. Who is the father? was she raped?
Uh oh, Sam.
Good story. You can do a lot with it, but you do need to fix your grammar. It isn't as bad as some of the stories on here, but I am a grammar Nazi. And you spelled 'board' wrong. It's bored.
Please update. Who is the father? was she raped?