for Fox Emblem11/9/2008 c4 Sweet-n-Sour-Vixen
I really like your story its different from anything i have read. keep up the good work i can't wait for the next chapter.
I really like your story its different from anything i have read. keep up the good work i can't wait for the next chapter.
11/9/2008 c4 
7DragonBlade00
This is a good story, but you need to slow it down and take time to check your spelling.
7DragonBlade00This is a good story, but you need to slow it down and take time to check your spelling.
9/18/2008 c3 Wirespeed91
I like this story, though the continual misspelling of "Tayuya" gets on my nerves, THANK YOU for spelling it right in at the end. At least now i know that you aren't completely dumb _ lol :P
anyway, good job and update soon
I like this story, though the continual misspelling of "Tayuya" gets on my nerves, THANK YOU for spelling it right in at the end. At least now i know that you aren't completely dumb _ lol :P
anyway, good job and update soon
9/18/2008 c2 8soundless steps
Okay, you forgot how to put in Sasuke in the discriptions and her name is spelled Tayuya. I don't care when a random word is mis-spelled but don't mis-spell characters.
8soundless stepsOkay, you forgot how to put in Sasuke in the discriptions and her name is spelled Tayuya. I don't care when a random word is mis-spelled but don't mis-spell characters.
9/18/2008 c3 4Kyuubi123
Nice chapter. Maybe a little rushed but i do understand the need to update. I believe that the pairing should be naruto/ hinata simple because they have the most interaction, they have a bond that can be easily used for plot development and because, in my opinon, they are the best pairing out there. This is only a suggestion but what if you had hinata go with someone else for a while until both naruto and hinata realize that the one they truly love is the one who was always with them. Sappy i know but it would open up a lot of possibilities as a writer. I don't believe they should instantly fall in love as that isn't realistic love should build like a growing fire, not explode light an inferno because that which burns the brightest burns the quickest. But i digress, i can't wait until the next one and you expand upon hinata's reaction to her first kill. Keep up the good work.
4Kyuubi123Nice chapter. Maybe a little rushed but i do understand the need to update. I believe that the pairing should be naruto/ hinata simple because they have the most interaction, they have a bond that can be easily used for plot development and because, in my opinon, they are the best pairing out there. This is only a suggestion but what if you had hinata go with someone else for a while until both naruto and hinata realize that the one they truly love is the one who was always with them. Sappy i know but it would open up a lot of possibilities as a writer. I don't believe they should instantly fall in love as that isn't realistic love should build like a growing fire, not explode light an inferno because that which burns the brightest burns the quickest. But i digress, i can't wait until the next one and you expand upon hinata's reaction to her first kill. Keep up the good work.
9/18/2008 c2 8RasenganFin
Spelling
Genin
Chunin
Ino Yamanaka
Chouji Akamichi
Tayuya
A little work on the spelling and it's good.
8RasenganFinSpelling
Genin
Chunin
Ino Yamanaka
Chouji Akamichi
Tayuya
A little work on the spelling and it's good.
9/15/2008 c2 PsyCHo
Nice story. Too bad you do many spelling mistakes. Looking forward for next chapters.
Nice story. Too bad you do many spelling mistakes. Looking forward for next chapters.
9/14/2008 c2 4Kyuubi123
Very good story! I was instantly grabbed by the unique plot and the character development. I normally dont like oc's but i find myself intrigued by tyuya. I believe that you made the correct choice in stopping now. Just as men love lingure YOU GOT TO LEAVE SOMETHING TO THE IMAGINATION! I truly enjoy reading this story and beg you not to quit. If people don't appreciate this story than sucks for them. Keep up the good work your a good writer!
4Kyuubi123Very good story! I was instantly grabbed by the unique plot and the character development. I normally dont like oc's but i find myself intrigued by tyuya. I believe that you made the correct choice in stopping now. Just as men love lingure YOU GOT TO LEAVE SOMETHING TO THE IMAGINATION! I truly enjoy reading this story and beg you not to quit. If people don't appreciate this story than sucks for them. Keep up the good work your a good writer!
9/14/2008 c2 3piratequeen11
I wonder where naruto came from...
LOL! I couldn't help but get a kick out of when you said that you spent most of your time coming up with names for sasuke! XD
3piratequeen11I wonder where naruto came from...
LOL! I couldn't help but get a kick out of when you said that you spent most of your time coming up with names for sasuke! XD