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8/28/2021 c1 2k+Hawki
-“Carter felt his Brother…”

Should be “brother.”

-“Name it” replied Marian…

Should be a comma after “it.” Should also be on a new line, as it’s a new character talking.

-“Stay” said Guy simply.

Same comma issue. Also, “simply” really sticks out, since it’s an adverb.

-“I will stay” said Marian…

Same issue.

(The comma issue is repeated multiple times, don’t have time to point all of them out.)

-“It’s your Father. You have lost your Father.”

Similar capitalization issue.

-A Sheriff-free life…

Same issue.

“…remained of the Gang.”

And again.

-“thank you” said Will…

Should be “Thank you,” said Will. Should also start a new line.

-Anyway, there’s so many punctuation, spacing, and capitalization errors, it became really hard to read this. Granted, I’m not that familiar with Robin Hood, so that doesn’t help, but even so, could have benefitted from additional proofreading.
10/13/2008 c1 52Shadow-ofthe-Night35
I'm going to have to find your longer fic now. This was very good. I love how you found all these different moments. Very well done.

Shadow
9/25/2008 c1 102The North Wyn
How sweet! Poor Much, though... :)
9/22/2008 c1 12Madame Beret
OMG I really really liked that. The little one liners before the scene from the show fitted perfectly. Almost like lines of a poem! And the little Djaq and Will twist at the end

Aw

x

Hannah

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