for A Helping Hand10/8/2008 c3 
110Enkidu07
great range! h/c, suspense, emotions, dialog... Very very cool!
What is coming!
110Enkidu07great range! h/c, suspense, emotions, dialog... Very very cool!
What is coming!
10/8/2008 c3 1kwangmablade
This is an interesting idea and I am enjoying it so far but no offense when I say that "Abby" feels very Mary-Sue like to me. In the convience store it should have been no problem for Sam to ice the demon holding the gun or even all of them at the same time and then we come to the trust issues. Sam and Dean have absolutely no proof that "Abby" is who and what she says she is but they are willing to let a stranger like her stay with them while they are injured and drive the Impala right after they just got jumped by strangers who were actually Liliths demons in disguise? Castiel at least shows something resembling proof that hes not bullshitting them. I'm not trying to flame you or anything like that its just that this feels very rushed to me.
1kwangmabladeThis is an interesting idea and I am enjoying it so far but no offense when I say that "Abby" feels very Mary-Sue like to me. In the convience store it should have been no problem for Sam to ice the demon holding the gun or even all of them at the same time and then we come to the trust issues. Sam and Dean have absolutely no proof that "Abby" is who and what she says she is but they are willing to let a stranger like her stay with them while they are injured and drive the Impala right after they just got jumped by strangers who were actually Liliths demons in disguise? Castiel at least shows something resembling proof that hes not bullshitting them. I'm not trying to flame you or anything like that its just that this feels very rushed to me.
10/7/2008 c3 111deangirl1
I have to admit I wasn't too sure about this. But I think that I am starting to love Abby. I am definitely in love with the snark she inspires in Dean! Great dialogue here! I also am really impressed that you don't have her spouting out easy answers. Her answers feel very much like the ones Kripke would be ok with... Can't wait to see what evil lurks... And I'm thinking that Dean's head hurting is going to become significant too...
111deangirl1I have to admit I wasn't too sure about this. But I think that I am starting to love Abby. I am definitely in love with the snark she inspires in Dean! Great dialogue here! I also am really impressed that you don't have her spouting out easy answers. Her answers feel very much like the ones Kripke would be ok with... Can't wait to see what evil lurks... And I'm thinking that Dean's head hurting is going to become significant too...
10/7/2008 c3 4Ster1
Very nicely written! Dean is so snarky-gotta love the boy..*pets*
And Sam, wanting to see the angel sword...aw, Sammy...
Great chapter!
4Ster1Very nicely written! Dean is so snarky-gotta love the boy..*pets*
And Sam, wanting to see the angel sword...aw, Sammy...
Great chapter!
9/30/2008 c2 83sammygirl1963
Awesome chapter! Abby is definitely going to be good for the boys, but she id definitely going to have her work cut out for her if she's going to watch over them.
Poor Sam, that reduction sounded painful! OUCH!
Sammy was aslo pretty smart in figuring out just who sheas!
Can't wait for more!
83sammygirl1963Awesome chapter! Abby is definitely going to be good for the boys, but she id definitely going to have her work cut out for her if she's going to watch over them.
Poor Sam, that reduction sounded painful! OUCH!
Sammy was aslo pretty smart in figuring out just who sheas!
Can't wait for more!
9/29/2008 c2 110Enkidu07
Okay so you cleaned that situation up beyond my wildest expectations! Very nicely done. Huge grin over here! Beautiful beautiful! hee hee. *ecstatic*
110Enkidu07Okay so you cleaned that situation up beyond my wildest expectations! Very nicely done. Huge grin over here! Beautiful beautiful! hee hee. *ecstatic*
9/29/2008 c2 4alwaysateen
Awesome new chapter!
This girl was Ruby or an angel... Pretty cool to meet another angel, I'm starting to like her more then Castiel. :)
Well, if Castiel heal the psychic Pamela, then I'm really gonna like him but that's another story.
I'm just glad it's not Ruby because I can't stand her this season!
4alwaysateenAwesome new chapter!
This girl was Ruby or an angel... Pretty cool to meet another angel, I'm starting to like her more then Castiel. :)
Well, if Castiel heal the psychic Pamela, then I'm really gonna like him but that's another story.
I'm just glad it's not Ruby because I can't stand her this season!
9/29/2008 c1 110Enkidu07
So excited to see that there is a chapter 2 already there waiting! I was worried that you were going to make such a mess and then not clean it up :) Riveted so far - On to chapter 2!
110Enkidu07So excited to see that there is a chapter 2 already there waiting! I was worried that you were going to make such a mess and then not clean it up :) Riveted so far - On to chapter 2!
9/29/2008 c2 11Halcyon Impulsion
Snappy little lady, isn't she? :) I like her :) This is fabulous. I love it. Listing my favorite parts would have meant copying most of it, so I'll refrain, but please do write fast. Good writing, excellent character voice, interesting story. Very cool :)
11Halcyon ImpulsionSnappy little lady, isn't she? :) I like her :) This is fabulous. I love it. Listing my favorite parts would have meant copying most of it, so I'll refrain, but please do write fast. Good writing, excellent character voice, interesting story. Very cool :)
9/29/2008 c1 Halcyon Impulsion
Welcome to writing :) Glad you're here :) Nice first chapter, I'm looking forward to more. Language was a little more than I tend to prefer. My favorite parts:
“You bite your tongue!” Dean took one hand off the steering wheel and jabbed a finger at Sam.
“Shut up.”
“You shut up.”
“No—you shut up, you—pie-basher!” (heehee)
The whole “respect” part of his conversation with Castiel obviously hadn’t taken hold. (lol, we are talking about Dean Winchester)
“So how much did you have to suck up to your boss to get this job?” he gritted out. Weak, yeah, but it was effort.
(poor dude, E for effort though)
Very interested to see who the woman is! Nice job on the fight scene. Write fast!
Welcome to writing :) Glad you're here :) Nice first chapter, I'm looking forward to more. Language was a little more than I tend to prefer. My favorite parts:
“You bite your tongue!” Dean took one hand off the steering wheel and jabbed a finger at Sam.
“Shut up.”
“You shut up.”
“No—you shut up, you—pie-basher!” (heehee)
The whole “respect” part of his conversation with Castiel obviously hadn’t taken hold. (lol, we are talking about Dean Winchester)
“So how much did you have to suck up to your boss to get this job?” he gritted out. Weak, yeah, but it was effort.
(poor dude, E for effort though)
Very interested to see who the woman is! Nice job on the fight scene. Write fast!