11/13/2013 c48 72accioweasleys4
This was cute. What is funny is that they both appear in the mirror in Harry's first year!
This was cute. What is funny is that they both appear in the mirror in Harry's first year!
11/9/2013 c47 10J.F.C
You definitely captured Narcissa's character really well in this oneshot. I can definitely see her as the type of person that would try to stay loyal to her family's beliefs, but in reality all she wants is a happy family that actually cares and love each other... something like the Weasleys, I guess. ;)
You definitely captured Narcissa's character really well in this oneshot. I can definitely see her as the type of person that would try to stay loyal to her family's beliefs, but in reality all she wants is a happy family that actually cares and love each other... something like the Weasleys, I guess. ;)
11/5/2013 c47 19xThe Painted Lady
Ooh, Narcissa! Interesting. First of all, I like how you divided this into sections, taking us through different stages in Narcissa's life and elaborating on them in a very nice way. I particularly loved the fact that this starts when Cissy's a teenager and ends with her being grandmother. Overall, I felt like you gave us a good insight into her character here - it's interesting, and I like how the one thing it seems Narcissa ever wanted was happiness and love, and she appears content with the family she has when she's older, which I think rings true to what her character was in the books. I loved your little details of Draco here, too, and it's clear that Narcissa cares so much about him. I think this managed to show us a good side of Cissy, a side that's loving and caring to those she's close to (only to those she's close to.) Well done.
Ooh, Narcissa! Interesting. First of all, I like how you divided this into sections, taking us through different stages in Narcissa's life and elaborating on them in a very nice way. I particularly loved the fact that this starts when Cissy's a teenager and ends with her being grandmother. Overall, I felt like you gave us a good insight into her character here - it's interesting, and I like how the one thing it seems Narcissa ever wanted was happiness and love, and she appears content with the family she has when she's older, which I think rings true to what her character was in the books. I loved your little details of Draco here, too, and it's clear that Narcissa cares so much about him. I think this managed to show us a good side of Cissy, a side that's loving and caring to those she's close to (only to those she's close to.) Well done.
11/2/2013 c47 131autumn midnights
I love your characterization of Narcissa here. I especially love teenage Narcissa in the beginning, recognizing that her family is unhappy and that there's something wrong, but also wanting to be loyal because it's what's expected. It just fits with her personality so well, in my opinion. Narcissa here is very in-character; you've really captured that sense of how she believes family is important, like how we see her in DH, and I really like that what Narcissa sees in the Mirror is her family, except happier. I really like the ending section, also - I'm glad you ended it on a happy note. I like how Scorpius is such a light to them, also, and how he proves that they can indeed be happy now that the war is over. This was amazing, great work!
I love your characterization of Narcissa here. I especially love teenage Narcissa in the beginning, recognizing that her family is unhappy and that there's something wrong, but also wanting to be loyal because it's what's expected. It just fits with her personality so well, in my opinion. Narcissa here is very in-character; you've really captured that sense of how she believes family is important, like how we see her in DH, and I really like that what Narcissa sees in the Mirror is her family, except happier. I really like the ending section, also - I'm glad you ended it on a happy note. I like how Scorpius is such a light to them, also, and how he proves that they can indeed be happy now that the war is over. This was amazing, great work!
10/27/2013 c44 126FandaticForeverAndAlways
Neville Longbottom! He is such a brilliant character and you certainly did a good job with him! :D I loved this. You wrote this very well and portrayed the character transformation that took place in Neville to the notch. And it was so canon that I am sure some if not all did happen in the books in the sidelines. Comparing this to a fairytale (almost) and Neville rising as a warrior, that's what I enjoyed the most in this story. And the part with Hannah involved was very cute too.
My favorite was of course the ending, the last sentence - it made the story effective and was a perfect ending.
Good job with this! :)
Neville Longbottom! He is such a brilliant character and you certainly did a good job with him! :D I loved this. You wrote this very well and portrayed the character transformation that took place in Neville to the notch. And it was so canon that I am sure some if not all did happen in the books in the sidelines. Comparing this to a fairytale (almost) and Neville rising as a warrior, that's what I enjoyed the most in this story. And the part with Hannah involved was very cute too.
My favorite was of course the ending, the last sentence - it made the story effective and was a perfect ending.
Good job with this! :)
10/27/2013 c46 FandaticForeverAndAlways
Aww, that was so sad! Poor Albus, he is the one who must live with it in the end. Scorpius is one of my favorite characters, and I love reading next-gen. I think you did a great job with this, the characters were portrayed very well and emotions got across great too. I can't believe that Scorpius ended up killing himself even after having Albus, I guess he was in too deep to just let go of his scars.
The most I liked about this was the fact that you used the same sentence in the end as in the beginning.
Good job on this! :)
Aww, that was so sad! Poor Albus, he is the one who must live with it in the end. Scorpius is one of my favorite characters, and I love reading next-gen. I think you did a great job with this, the characters were portrayed very well and emotions got across great too. I can't believe that Scorpius ended up killing himself even after having Albus, I guess he was in too deep to just let go of his scars.
The most I liked about this was the fact that you used the same sentence in the end as in the beginning.
Good job on this! :)
10/22/2013 c44 61Soccerisawesome19
Beautiful. Just beautiful. I've always admired Neville, I mean there's so much character build up on him through out the books.
And this just fills in the blanks that were left.
I love how you made his grandmother a 'monster' because really, to Neville (even though he loved her) that's what she was, always comparing him to his almost-dead parents.
And how you incorporated Hannah into this, as the 'princess'.
And that last line. Amazing.
Great job! :)
Beautiful. Just beautiful. I've always admired Neville, I mean there's so much character build up on him through out the books.
And this just fills in the blanks that were left.
I love how you made his grandmother a 'monster' because really, to Neville (even though he loved her) that's what she was, always comparing him to his almost-dead parents.
And how you incorporated Hannah into this, as the 'princess'.
And that last line. Amazing.
Great job! :)
10/21/2013 c46 10J.F.C
This was so sad and heartbreaking, I really feel sorry for Malfoy... he must really have fallen deep into depression for him to kill himself like that. I also find it very interesting how you have used the mirror of erased in here, it felt a bit different, and actually better (at least for me) than in other of your versions. Anyway, even if I know this oneshot ended up in such tragedy, I would have loved to read more of it but this is would have to be enough, I guess... love can make you do really stupid things. :(
This was so sad and heartbreaking, I really feel sorry for Malfoy... he must really have fallen deep into depression for him to kill himself like that. I also find it very interesting how you have used the mirror of erased in here, it felt a bit different, and actually better (at least for me) than in other of your versions. Anyway, even if I know this oneshot ended up in such tragedy, I would have loved to read more of it but this is would have to be enough, I guess... love can make you do really stupid things. :(
10/20/2013 c44 J.F.C
First time I actually read a story with Neville and Hannah, I mostly see him getting paired with Luna. Anyway, this oneshot was awesome. I really love how in this short story we see a very strong psychological approach of what Neville's life was, who he is, etc. It was really interesting, especially with that scene with Mirror of Erised... I feel like it increase that psychological perspective even more. I also agree with referring to Neville as an orphan... with the way he was raised and treated by his grandmother, he was indeed one, as she only wanted to see her own son in him... not Neville, himself. ;)
First time I actually read a story with Neville and Hannah, I mostly see him getting paired with Luna. Anyway, this oneshot was awesome. I really love how in this short story we see a very strong psychological approach of what Neville's life was, who he is, etc. It was really interesting, especially with that scene with Mirror of Erised... I feel like it increase that psychological perspective even more. I also agree with referring to Neville as an orphan... with the way he was raised and treated by his grandmother, he was indeed one, as she only wanted to see her own son in him... not Neville, himself. ;)
10/19/2013 c47 16LightsPast
I really like this. I love your portrayal of the unhappy families in this story, and I really like Narcissa's narration. I especially like the first and third scenes. Draco and Narcissa's interaction was perfectly written
I really like this. I love your portrayal of the unhappy families in this story, and I really like Narcissa's narration. I especially like the first and third scenes. Draco and Narcissa's interaction was perfectly written
10/18/2013 c46 61Soccerisawesome19
Wow. Deep.
Wow. Well once again, love how you used second person point of view, and also the pairing (AlbusXScorpius 3)
And, I also love how you repeated the first line at the end, that just kind of emphasizes it all and makes it more deep.
I like looking at Scorpius in this way-like he was Sirius, except Sirius didn't love James (or did he) and that last part, where it says [You're drowning, drowning, drowning in a sea of red and everything and nothing, and was it worth it, little boy? You'll never know, now.] and that line [In the end, he gave you all the love he had and it still wasn't enough to save you from yourself] because well in life things like that happen and the way you used the quote was amazing as well as how you put the Mirror of Erised into this. :)
Wow. Deep.
Wow. Well once again, love how you used second person point of view, and also the pairing (AlbusXScorpius 3)
And, I also love how you repeated the first line at the end, that just kind of emphasizes it all and makes it more deep.
I like looking at Scorpius in this way-like he was Sirius, except Sirius didn't love James (or did he) and that last part, where it says [You're drowning, drowning, drowning in a sea of red and everything and nothing, and was it worth it, little boy? You'll never know, now.] and that line [In the end, he gave you all the love he had and it still wasn't enough to save you from yourself] because well in life things like that happen and the way you used the quote was amazing as well as how you put the Mirror of Erised into this. :)
10/17/2013 c2 Soccerisawesome19
Ack awesomeness.
I love how it's not canon. I know some people like it canon, but screw it. This is amazing.
Also, I love how this is in second person pov.
The plot twist is great!
Anyways great job, and good luck in the future.
Ack awesomeness.
I love how it's not canon. I know some people like it canon, but screw it. This is amazing.
Also, I love how this is in second person pov.
The plot twist is great!
Anyways great job, and good luck in the future.
10/17/2013 c1 Soccerisawesome19
Wow. In this short paragraph, you sure have put a lot into it.
This is beautiful. Your writing is beautiful. Even the summary is beautiful.
I love how it's The Grey Lady and the Bloody Baron, and how it displays her feelings.
Wow. In this short paragraph, you sure have put a lot into it.
This is beautiful. Your writing is beautiful. Even the summary is beautiful.
I love how it's The Grey Lady and the Bloody Baron, and how it displays her feelings.
10/17/2013 c46 131autumn midnights
Oh my god, this is so sad. It's angsty and wonderfully-written, and I really liked your style here - second person just works so well with angst, I think. Your characterization of Scorpius was very interesting - I don't see him as a Gryffindor, myself, but you wrote him really well here. I like how you included the Mirror in this, without making it the focal point of the story - because there's so many Mirror-focused stories out there, it's nice to see one that includes it without completely centering on it. I don't even ship these two, but you had me rooting for them in this particular story. There were a few SPaG mistakes that I noticed reading through this, but nothing particularly large. I really like your description of the accepting atmosphere of the Weasley-Potter home - it does make a lot of sense that they'll accept anyone, as long as that person is being respectful. Really nice job!
Oh my god, this is so sad. It's angsty and wonderfully-written, and I really liked your style here - second person just works so well with angst, I think. Your characterization of Scorpius was very interesting - I don't see him as a Gryffindor, myself, but you wrote him really well here. I like how you included the Mirror in this, without making it the focal point of the story - because there's so many Mirror-focused stories out there, it's nice to see one that includes it without completely centering on it. I don't even ship these two, but you had me rooting for them in this particular story. There were a few SPaG mistakes that I noticed reading through this, but nothing particularly large. I really like your description of the accepting atmosphere of the Weasley-Potter home - it does make a lot of sense that they'll accept anyone, as long as that person is being respectful. Really nice job!