for A Foxes Tale12/11/2022 c31 Regtech
How you are sticking to canon after so much AU characters doesnt make sense. You are forcing it too much especially after adding bleach and inuyasha to the fold.
The story flows poorly and feels forced as shit. Naruto alone right now could blitz the whole continent safely with his clones alone, without danger of getting captured.
You made an OP character with the brains, reaources and abilities to heavily damage everyone with short notice. If he doesnt abuse it, then that just means you have written yourself into a corner.
This Naruto is more realistic, so not taking the rinnegan for safe keeping is already pushing it to the limits
How you are sticking to canon after so much AU characters doesnt make sense. You are forcing it too much especially after adding bleach and inuyasha to the fold.
The story flows poorly and feels forced as shit. Naruto alone right now could blitz the whole continent safely with his clones alone, without danger of getting captured.
You made an OP character with the brains, reaources and abilities to heavily damage everyone with short notice. If he doesnt abuse it, then that just means you have written yourself into a corner.
This Naruto is more realistic, so not taking the rinnegan for safe keeping is already pushing it to the limits
12/11/2022 c30 Regtech
Things got better and then you made bot naruto and jiraiya leave the rinnegang like that? This the problem when you write smart characters, you just cant keep up and end doing this stupid plot decisions
Things got better and then you made bot naruto and jiraiya leave the rinnegang like that? This the problem when you write smart characters, you just cant keep up and end doing this stupid plot decisions
12/11/2022 c26 Regtech
You have nerfrd naruto too much. You made a smart naruto with resources and chakra, yet he hasnt recreated the hiraishin or anything or else worth of note during those 3 years. Hell, he doesnt even seem to abuse kage bunshin as he did.
He could have made an a squad of chakra pumped clones to blitz moryu, but no. You left shion and the guard guy defenseless
You have nerfrd naruto too much. You made a smart naruto with resources and chakra, yet he hasnt recreated the hiraishin or anything or else worth of note during those 3 years. Hell, he doesnt even seem to abuse kage bunshin as he did.
He could have made an a squad of chakra pumped clones to blitz moryu, but no. You left shion and the guard guy defenseless
12/11/2022 c10 Regtech
Doesnt really make sense that Ino suddenly jumped a random guy when it was stated that Ino was developing feelings for Naruto or at least considered him handsome.
This is a girl that worshipped Sasuke for god how long and suddenly realized Naruto could have potentially been the one she was fangirling. Yet she suddenly started kissing a random guy? Her pride would have rather shown he was beneath her eyes than what she actually did
Doesnt really make sense that Ino suddenly jumped a random guy when it was stated that Ino was developing feelings for Naruto or at least considered him handsome.
This is a girl that worshipped Sasuke for god how long and suddenly realized Naruto could have potentially been the one she was fangirling. Yet she suddenly started kissing a random guy? Her pride would have rather shown he was beneath her eyes than what she actually did
11/26/2022 c32 
101VFSNAKE
The pieces are in place. War is upon the Shinobi Nations. Let the fighting begin!
101VFSNAKEThe pieces are in place. War is upon the Shinobi Nations. Let the fighting begin!
11/26/2022 c32 shapeshifter340
great new story chapter cannot wait to see what happens next and have Naruto unlock the rinnegan eventually
great new story chapter cannot wait to see what happens next and have Naruto unlock the rinnegan eventually
11/18/2022 c5 ROBERT
with the his own lock pick set his had get his hands on the now dead mob boss money and gold bars and others stuff too , when over time Sakura and ion and ten-ten had move into his home now and marring to him but his made them workings on them body s now and seeing the whrilpool now his own lands when his the lord now,
with the his own lock pick set his had get his hands on the now dead mob boss money and gold bars and others stuff too , when over time Sakura and ion and ten-ten had move into his home now and marring to him but his made them workings on them body s now and seeing the whrilpool now his own lands when his the lord now,