for Unforeseen Circumstances3/20/2023 c18 Freddie1475
Awesome style and very interesting story. I can't believe you were so young when you wrote it, it's so mature. Of course it's much better if Cedric survives (after his death, the original story became too sad for me really), and of course who can save him if not our very resourceful favorite bookwworm (are you one too ? I bet you're very well read and Cedric would run after you ;-). Of course, it brings about the question : what then ? Certainly Cedric's death was meant to stress how the stakes were high for Harry Potter. Now, Cedric is alive, Hermione's got herself a boyfriend but also, Harry had much less work to do and was spared an encounter with his archenemy (of course, as soon as she had the dreams, we all knew she had to take Harry's place since the dreams indicated so and it was her only way of being there when the problem happened. Well, she's a hero now. Obviously in the sequel of the Butterfly effect, which we all hope you'll continue someday, a balance has to be found between Cedric and Hermione : he's got to save her life too; And since I read in the butterfly effect that he's started having dreams too, it's well on the way.
Awesome style and very interesting story. I can't believe you were so young when you wrote it, it's so mature. Of course it's much better if Cedric survives (after his death, the original story became too sad for me really), and of course who can save him if not our very resourceful favorite bookwworm (are you one too ? I bet you're very well read and Cedric would run after you ;-). Of course, it brings about the question : what then ? Certainly Cedric's death was meant to stress how the stakes were high for Harry Potter. Now, Cedric is alive, Hermione's got herself a boyfriend but also, Harry had much less work to do and was spared an encounter with his archenemy (of course, as soon as she had the dreams, we all knew she had to take Harry's place since the dreams indicated so and it was her only way of being there when the problem happened. Well, she's a hero now. Obviously in the sequel of the Butterfly effect, which we all hope you'll continue someday, a balance has to be found between Cedric and Hermione : he's got to save her life too; And since I read in the butterfly effect that he's started having dreams too, it's well on the way.
7/28/2021 c17 Terry Roberson
MORE!
MORE!
7/28/2021 c18 Terry Roberson
Please, a sequel!
Please, a sequel!
5/27/2021 c18 Hey
Yes a sequel
Yes a sequel
5/25/2021 c14 N4rDu7e
Wow
Wow
4/24/2020 c18 bichenta
Oh... I definitely understand why you chose the angst as the genre. I like your story because it shows so much of Hermione's angst with the situation. I can't imagine the burden of dreaming that someone you love is going to die. On top of it all there were the teenage dramma. I like to think that the Hermione from the books would act exactly how you wrotte. She's bend to follow the rules, but she knows what's is more important. I really liked how you developed the plot, crazy and "dark" Hermione was really cool. I can see the scene in which she was menaced by Moody/Barto and then obliviated like in a movie. I get distressed with so much Hermione distressed but I think that's what makes you fanfic so good.
Although I was nervous to discover if Cedric was going to survive, when I was reading the cemetery chapter I really believed that Hermione would die because of her choices. I really liked that Hermione took Harry's place in the tournament. That was brilliant! You're a great writter, thanks for your work. I'm going to check the sequel and I hope that you writte more Cedric/Hermione (but, this time, please give Hermione a break, she suffered so much in this one haha but just a little. I love bad ass Hermione)
Oh... I definitely understand why you chose the angst as the genre. I like your story because it shows so much of Hermione's angst with the situation. I can't imagine the burden of dreaming that someone you love is going to die. On top of it all there were the teenage dramma. I like to think that the Hermione from the books would act exactly how you wrotte. She's bend to follow the rules, but she knows what's is more important. I really liked how you developed the plot, crazy and "dark" Hermione was really cool. I can see the scene in which she was menaced by Moody/Barto and then obliviated like in a movie. I get distressed with so much Hermione distressed but I think that's what makes you fanfic so good.
Although I was nervous to discover if Cedric was going to survive, when I was reading the cemetery chapter I really believed that Hermione would die because of her choices. I really liked that Hermione took Harry's place in the tournament. That was brilliant! You're a great writter, thanks for your work. I'm going to check the sequel and I hope that you writte more Cedric/Hermione (but, this time, please give Hermione a break, she suffered so much in this one haha but just a little. I love bad ass Hermione)
9/13/2019 c18 CEDRlCDlGGORYS
Of course I want A sequel! This was amazing!
Of course I want A sequel! This was amazing!
7/19/2019 c18 Guest
I loved it so much it was just brilliant! Lovely! Amazing! Absolutely flawless!
I loved it so much it was just brilliant! Lovely! Amazing! Absolutely flawless!
6/11/2019 c7 
1bagelthebunny
Okay... So I'm sorry to say it, but despite my best efforts to keep reading, this is as far as I can go. Chapter 7. I would like to establish that this is not due to a lack of potential in your writing skills, but the utter ridiculousness of the plot. I hate leaving negative reviews, and I really do think that you can write something which is amazing, but this isn't it. When it comes down to it, your plot is based on a complete reliance on the turbulent and frivolous emotions of Hermione. Her description and character as you write her is convoluted and all over the place. What is her character even based on? Where is her moral standards? I really don't know. I can see that you are trying to build drama and push towards a certain ending, but in doing so you are losing the integrity of your characters. I always find that a great story starts and ends with progressive and dynamics character development. Stagnation and consistency in characters are not the key, it's a clear path towards development. They need to evolve in a realistic and organic way. Your story is beginning to feel forced, and that is a big problem based in the lack of character development. Despite this, I still feel like this idea has potential, and I would love to revisit this story after it has been edited. I definitely think you should keep writing. Every piece you write will be better than the last, and I'm sure that given time your stories will become more well rounded and convey your experience as a writer. Good luck!
1bagelthebunnyOkay... So I'm sorry to say it, but despite my best efforts to keep reading, this is as far as I can go. Chapter 7. I would like to establish that this is not due to a lack of potential in your writing skills, but the utter ridiculousness of the plot. I hate leaving negative reviews, and I really do think that you can write something which is amazing, but this isn't it. When it comes down to it, your plot is based on a complete reliance on the turbulent and frivolous emotions of Hermione. Her description and character as you write her is convoluted and all over the place. What is her character even based on? Where is her moral standards? I really don't know. I can see that you are trying to build drama and push towards a certain ending, but in doing so you are losing the integrity of your characters. I always find that a great story starts and ends with progressive and dynamics character development. Stagnation and consistency in characters are not the key, it's a clear path towards development. They need to evolve in a realistic and organic way. Your story is beginning to feel forced, and that is a big problem based in the lack of character development. Despite this, I still feel like this idea has potential, and I would love to revisit this story after it has been edited. I definitely think you should keep writing. Every piece you write will be better than the last, and I'm sure that given time your stories will become more well rounded and convey your experience as a writer. Good luck!