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Well, that was awesome and beautifully written.
Well, that was awesome and beautifully written.
12/16/2008 c1 
4karisma1again
I've read this twice now, all the while listening to Bruce Springsteen's song. It's well-written and undeniably hot.
Thank you for writing it. =)
4karisma1againI've read this twice now, all the while listening to Bruce Springsteen's song. It's well-written and undeniably hot.
Thank you for writing it. =)
12/12/2008 c1 agdkajf
That was absolutely beautiful!
It was sweet and hot and not too graphical, which suits the situation!
I loved it!
One thing, though, you wrote "She’s the image of Athena on top of some great monument in Greece , she’s perfect and he’s going to touch perfection."
Did you choose Athena deliberately? Or was it a mix-up with names?
Because Athena is the companion and protector of warriors and the goddess of herioc endevour and the virgin patron of Athens.
She's generally used as a symbol for strength, heroic deeds, sometimes even for intelligence and wisdom.
But never for beauty or perfection, as you used it(or at least that's what I think you used her for).
So what I think would fit the context better is the greek goddess Aphrodite, the goddess of love and beauty.
So maybe you meant Aphrodite, but typed Athena instead?
I think it would fit the context better if you used Aphrodite...
Anyways, it's your story and you get to decide what fits best!:)
I really liked your story, more than I can say with words, so please don't feel offended by my criticism, I was just trying to make it a bit more perfect!:)
Hopefully you'll write more Lexie/Mark fics in the future!
Love,
Mer
That was absolutely beautiful!
It was sweet and hot and not too graphical, which suits the situation!
I loved it!
One thing, though, you wrote "She’s the image of Athena on top of some great monument in Greece , she’s perfect and he’s going to touch perfection."
Did you choose Athena deliberately? Or was it a mix-up with names?
Because Athena is the companion and protector of warriors and the goddess of herioc endevour and the virgin patron of Athens.
She's generally used as a symbol for strength, heroic deeds, sometimes even for intelligence and wisdom.
But never for beauty or perfection, as you used it(or at least that's what I think you used her for).
So what I think would fit the context better is the greek goddess Aphrodite, the goddess of love and beauty.
So maybe you meant Aphrodite, but typed Athena instead?
I think it would fit the context better if you used Aphrodite...
Anyways, it's your story and you get to decide what fits best!:)
I really liked your story, more than I can say with words, so please don't feel offended by my criticism, I was just trying to make it a bit more perfect!:)
Hopefully you'll write more Lexie/Mark fics in the future!
Love,
Mer
12/11/2008 c1 37wooster182
I'm so glad you decided to post this here! This is great. I love the give and take between Mark and Lexie and you've described that beautifully!
37wooster182I'm so glad you decided to post this here! This is great. I love the give and take between Mark and Lexie and you've described that beautifully!