for Who Am I?8/20/2010 c8 TheMoreSmutTheBetter
I love how protective Draco is of Hermione, despite knowing for a short period time that she is his sister.
Well now, isn't Nott the good little sheep to follow his daddy's footsteps in being one of the Dark D0rk's brown-nosers.
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'She wiped around to come face to face with Voldemort.' ["wiped" ought to be "whipped"; "wiped" is to have cleaned a surface as in to wipe the spilled milk off of the table, whereas "whipped" is to turn around suddenly.]
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Great suspenseful ending for this chapter to make one wonder what will happen to Hermione.
Good story.
=)
I love how protective Draco is of Hermione, despite knowing for a short period time that she is his sister.
Well now, isn't Nott the good little sheep to follow his daddy's footsteps in being one of the Dark D0rk's brown-nosers.
.-.-.
'She wiped around to come face to face with Voldemort.' ["wiped" ought to be "whipped"; "wiped" is to have cleaned a surface as in to wipe the spilled milk off of the table, whereas "whipped" is to turn around suddenly.]
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Great suspenseful ending for this chapter to make one wonder what will happen to Hermione.
Good story.
=)
8/20/2010 c7 TheMoreSmutTheBetter
ARGH! You went back to NOT inserting blank spaces between character hand-offs in conversation, and change of locations throughout the chapter.
I got a kick out of Draco feeling squicked every time he witnessed Harry and Hermione kiss... too funny.
=D
Hmm, I wonder which death nibbler was told by MoldyShorts to have his child bring Hermione to the Dark Dork.
=p
ARGH! You went back to NOT inserting blank spaces between character hand-offs in conversation, and change of locations throughout the chapter.
I got a kick out of Draco feeling squicked every time he witnessed Harry and Hermione kiss... too funny.
=D
Hmm, I wonder which death nibbler was told by MoldyShorts to have his child bring Hermione to the Dark Dork.
=p
8/20/2010 c6 TheMoreSmutTheBetter
MoldyWart, in his desire for Hermione to be his bride, is a greedy little pig (not unlike a petulant toddler), similar to Ralphie's little brother, Randy, on Christmas saying, "that's mine," over and over again about all the presents under/by the Christmas tree, in the movie "A Christmas Story". Sheesh! LOL
:P
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'She handed him the letter from her mother and watched the look that came over his face. The twinkle was no longer in his eyes.
"Oh dear. This is not good."'
[DUH! You think? Don't you just love it when someone states the obvious and/or makes an understatement that makes you shake your head in disbelief? LOL]
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Good chapter... keep up the good work!
=)
MoldyWart, in his desire for Hermione to be his bride, is a greedy little pig (not unlike a petulant toddler), similar to Ralphie's little brother, Randy, on Christmas saying, "that's mine," over and over again about all the presents under/by the Christmas tree, in the movie "A Christmas Story". Sheesh! LOL
:P
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'She handed him the letter from her mother and watched the look that came over his face. The twinkle was no longer in his eyes.
"Oh dear. This is not good."'
[DUH! You think? Don't you just love it when someone states the obvious and/or makes an understatement that makes you shake your head in disbelief? LOL]
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Good chapter... keep up the good work!
=)
8/20/2010 c5 TheMoreSmutTheBetter
Ugh! This chapter was hard on the eyes to read due to the lack of blank lines between switching after one character has spoken and before the next character. The way it is currently presented, it is like one long paragraph. I just thought that you ought to know and please consider not doing so again in future chapters. Thank you.
=)
Other than that, I liked the revelation of Draco's epiphany that the whole fanaticism over blood status is cr@p, and so he is dating a nice girl that is a half-blood.
Well done.
=)
Ugh! This chapter was hard on the eyes to read due to the lack of blank lines between switching after one character has spoken and before the next character. The way it is currently presented, it is like one long paragraph. I just thought that you ought to know and please consider not doing so again in future chapters. Thank you.
=)
Other than that, I liked the revelation of Draco's epiphany that the whole fanaticism over blood status is cr@p, and so he is dating a nice girl that is a half-blood.
Well done.
=)
8/20/2010 c4 TheMoreSmutTheBetter
Aww, in a way it was sweet of Draco to have talk with Hermione regarding her position in the war going so far as to ask her to be neutral. I'm glad that Hermione stuck to her guns in regards to her dedication to and love for Harry.
Grr, Lucius is such a selfish and malicious §hit to have purposely gone out of his way to kill John Granger, Jane Granger's husband and Hermione's father, or at least the man that raised her as his own.
C
Lucius is a cold b@st@rd to be at the burial waiting for the Granger women (Hermione and her mother), like a vulture circling overhead a creature dying, or with no hope, in the desert. He is also cruel and manipulative to use emotional blackmail to force/coerce Jane into agreeing to live with him in order to be able to see Hermione on a regular basis.
Well written.
=)
Aww, in a way it was sweet of Draco to have talk with Hermione regarding her position in the war going so far as to ask her to be neutral. I'm glad that Hermione stuck to her guns in regards to her dedication to and love for Harry.
Grr, Lucius is such a selfish and malicious §hit to have purposely gone out of his way to kill John Granger, Jane Granger's husband and Hermione's father, or at least the man that raised her as his own.
C
Lucius is a cold b@st@rd to be at the burial waiting for the Granger women (Hermione and her mother), like a vulture circling overhead a creature dying, or with no hope, in the desert. He is also cruel and manipulative to use emotional blackmail to force/coerce Jane into agreeing to live with him in order to be able to see Hermione on a regular basis.
Well written.
=)
8/20/2010 c3 TheMoreSmutTheBetter
I wonder how much of Lucius working to get Hermione back into his life is for political gain, and how much, if any, is for love of the idea of having had a daughter with ex-sweetheart.
I also wonder what Draco's take on the revelation of Hermione being his sister, and how Harry will take the news, you know?
Good drama build up and well written too.
=)
I wonder how much of Lucius working to get Hermione back into his life is for political gain, and how much, if any, is for love of the idea of having had a daughter with ex-sweetheart.
I also wonder what Draco's take on the revelation of Hermione being his sister, and how Harry will take the news, you know?
Good drama build up and well written too.
=)
8/20/2010 c2 TheMoreSmutTheBetter
Seeing as Hermione's mother is a half-blood, and her father is a pure(full) blood, that would make Hermione a 3/4 pure blood; which is more pure blood than Harry or Professor Snape. I wonder if they have a term for people that are 3/4 pure blood... just curious.
=)
WooHoo! Hermione is dating Harry... fantastic!
It is great that Hermione and Draco have called a truce and worked well together to come up with a prefects patrolling schedule.
I got a kick out of Hermione giving Draco a summary of the book "Twilight". I then cackled up a storm when I read of Lucius' reaction to learning that his daughter, Hermione, is dating Harry.
This was a good first chapter; it is well written.
=)
Seeing as Hermione's mother is a half-blood, and her father is a pure(full) blood, that would make Hermione a 3/4 pure blood; which is more pure blood than Harry or Professor Snape. I wonder if they have a term for people that are 3/4 pure blood... just curious.
=)
WooHoo! Hermione is dating Harry... fantastic!
It is great that Hermione and Draco have called a truce and worked well together to come up with a prefects patrolling schedule.
I got a kick out of Hermione giving Draco a summary of the book "Twilight". I then cackled up a storm when I read of Lucius' reaction to learning that his daughter, Hermione, is dating Harry.
This was a good first chapter; it is well written.
=)
8/20/2010 c1 TheMoreSmutTheBetter
It is so cool that Lucius was in love with someone else before being married to Narcissa. Seeing as that the girl that he loved was a half-blood, it means that he wasn't always a bigoted piece of crud. However, it is so sad that he was not allowed to marry her, let alone given knowledge that she was pregnant with his child.
Well written.
=D
It is so cool that Lucius was in love with someone else before being married to Narcissa. Seeing as that the girl that he loved was a half-blood, it means that he wasn't always a bigoted piece of crud. However, it is so sad that he was not allowed to marry her, let alone given knowledge that she was pregnant with his child.
Well written.
=D
8/13/2010 c10 B. Oots
Please update soon, so I can read, how they stop Tom from marrying Hermione?
Please update soon, so I can read, how they stop Tom from marrying Hermione?
8/13/2010 c10 
3LordNemesis
Looks at the author looks at wand eather harry and hermione marry or else.
3LordNemesisLooks at the author looks at wand eather harry and hermione marry or else.
8/13/2010 c4 4Aries The Ram
I laughed, so very very hard when the killing curse was cast.
While normally i'd say it was a terrible way to ruin what should have been a tragedy, the rushed and nearly flittering way that it was wrote brought to mind the unimportance of the act in Lucius's mind.
So, again Kudos.
4Aries The RamI laughed, so very very hard when the killing curse was cast.
While normally i'd say it was a terrible way to ruin what should have been a tragedy, the rushed and nearly flittering way that it was wrote brought to mind the unimportance of the act in Lucius's mind.
So, again Kudos.
8/13/2010 c2 Aries The Ram
I'm absolutely astonished at how rushed this feels.
I feel as though nothing is really told, but at the same time everything required is told. Its like looking at one of my own chapters, before I add in any detail.
Its quite a decent read though, quick enough to not get bored and somewhat interesting enough to keep me going to the next chapter.
So Kudos to you.
I'm absolutely astonished at how rushed this feels.
I feel as though nothing is really told, but at the same time everything required is told. Its like looking at one of my own chapters, before I add in any detail.
Its quite a decent read though, quick enough to not get bored and somewhat interesting enough to keep me going to the next chapter.
So Kudos to you.