for Who Am I?4/1/2009 c2 
2harmonious
I love the plot and everything but it needs more details and I'm confused. In the beginning you said how all Harry talked about was Cho and then he moved onto Ginny?
2harmoniousI love the plot and everything but it needs more details and I'm confused. In the beginning you said how all Harry talked about was Cho and then he moved onto Ginny?
3/31/2009 c2 iiyah
elow! i'm a writer in fanfiction too :) well, i'm also a newbie, but just some tips i might add :D the story's over-all idea was good but the whole story was kinda fastpaced :D try adding more to it like, details of their surroundings, how they feel, what they think about the reactions of the people around them and things like that so that the story wouldn''t look so choppy ad boring. also, you might want to describe the hallway when they walk, is it noisy or something? or the street, if it is packed or desserted, if it is night or day, because not everyone can picture out what you have in your head :D godbless ;)
elow! i'm a writer in fanfiction too :) well, i'm also a newbie, but just some tips i might add :D the story's over-all idea was good but the whole story was kinda fastpaced :D try adding more to it like, details of their surroundings, how they feel, what they think about the reactions of the people around them and things like that so that the story wouldn''t look so choppy ad boring. also, you might want to describe the hallway when they walk, is it noisy or something? or the street, if it is packed or desserted, if it is night or day, because not everyone can picture out what you have in your head :D godbless ;)
1/10/2009 c2 31Sakura Lisel
Okay, if Jane is considered a 'blood traitor' that would mean she's from a pureblood family right? So WHY was Hermoine raised thinking she's born from two muggle parents?
31Sakura LiselOkay, if Jane is considered a 'blood traitor' that would mean she's from a pureblood family right? So WHY was Hermoine raised thinking she's born from two muggle parents?
1/9/2009 c2 2Kurozaki Shizune
hahah, mione likes twilight and baked cheese like her mom and draco's acting sorta stupid, it's funny, pls update asap
2Kurozaki Shizunehahah, mione likes twilight and baked cheese like her mom and draco's acting sorta stupid, it's funny, pls update asap
1/8/2009 c1 3DRAMIONEFANLIKEFOREVER
Hey! You can't stop now! It went pretty good! Come on...please...please...please...please...please...please...please
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3DRAMIONEFANLIKEFOREVERHey! You can't stop now! It went pretty good! Come on...please...please...please...please...please...please...please
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12/19/2008 c1 2Kurozaki Shizune
curious, what pairings will happen i wonder. and can i make a guess? is the slytherin 'mione is related to draco malfoy? this looks like it'll be good, i can't wait
2Kurozaki Shizunecurious, what pairings will happen i wonder. and can i make a guess? is the slytherin 'mione is related to draco malfoy? this looks like it'll be good, i can't wait
12/16/2008 c1 lovette
please continue loving it
please continue loving it
12/16/2008 c1 3BeyondRubies
I like it. This could be very interesting. I can't wait to see where you go with this.
I would like to see a bit more description in the later chapters, though. I would like to know what is going on in the characters minds and to "see" what is going on around them.
Can't wait for more! Hugs.
3BeyondRubiesI like it. This could be very interesting. I can't wait to see where you go with this.
I would like to see a bit more description in the later chapters, though. I would like to know what is going on in the characters minds and to "see" what is going on around them.
Can't wait for more! Hugs.