for Amelia of Mirkwood8/13/2011 c1 Anon
Eh?
Eh?
9/27/2009 c4 
32Wtiger5
I like the chapter. I think that Legolas reacted well. the next chapter should be very interesting I think
32Wtiger5I like the chapter. I think that Legolas reacted well. the next chapter should be very interesting I think
9/26/2009 c4 6Invisible.Words
:/ It's a little more angsty then I am cotton to but I'm looking forward to your improvments and your future chapters.
6Invisible.Words:/ It's a little more angsty then I am cotton to but I'm looking forward to your improvments and your future chapters.
8/25/2009 c2 32Wtiger5
I like your story but I would like to offer a suggestion that was given to me when I first began writing for the school newspaper. Be consistent in what you call your character. If you want Amelia to be nicknamed Mia that's fine but use it consistently. Don't switch back and forth in your paragraphs. For example, in my story I refer to Faramir by his full name unless one of his friends is calling him by his nickname.
32Wtiger5I like your story but I would like to offer a suggestion that was given to me when I first began writing for the school newspaper. Be consistent in what you call your character. If you want Amelia to be nicknamed Mia that's fine but use it consistently. Don't switch back and forth in your paragraphs. For example, in my story I refer to Faramir by his full name unless one of his friends is calling him by his nickname.
8/9/2009 c3 BananaFish33
Okay, Mia isn't a hopeless Mary Sue. She's having problems fighting, which is a good thing. However, in this chapter it seems to be assumed that she is going to "help" the Fellowship somehow. Why is everyone suddenly so sure she's been sent to aid their mission? Why do Elrond and Gandalf automatically trust her just because she knows what's going on? There has been no discussion about it. And what are her friends doing? They appear to have disappeared. Your story just appears to be moving way too fast. I'm afraid you're rushing toward getting Mia and Legolas together without much thought as to the rationale of her being there or what she can actually contribute to the situation.
Okay, Mia isn't a hopeless Mary Sue. She's having problems fighting, which is a good thing. However, in this chapter it seems to be assumed that she is going to "help" the Fellowship somehow. Why is everyone suddenly so sure she's been sent to aid their mission? Why do Elrond and Gandalf automatically trust her just because she knows what's going on? There has been no discussion about it. And what are her friends doing? They appear to have disappeared. Your story just appears to be moving way too fast. I'm afraid you're rushing toward getting Mia and Legolas together without much thought as to the rationale of her being there or what she can actually contribute to the situation.
8/9/2009 c2 Invisible.Words
I think this should have more reviews than it does. It's written really well.
I think this should have more reviews than it does. It's written really well.
8/9/2009 c1 Invisible.Words
I'm looking forward to your updates. I really love your story. I hope to see it improve and such! :]
I'm looking forward to your updates. I really love your story. I hope to see it improve and such! :]