for Heart's Home12/4 c5 pincho
This was a fun and loving little story and a MUST read!
Ignore the other review...stupid autocorrect
This was a fun and loving little story and a MUST read!
Ignore the other review...stupid autocorrect
12/4 c5 pincho
This is a fun and loving little story and a mistake read!
This is a fun and loving little story and a mistake read!
12/4 c4 pincho
Hahaha so Ron isn't an asshole he's just extra slow
Hahaha so Ron isn't an asshole he's just extra slow
12/3 c3 pincho
I was really into the story until the whole semi forced drama. Hermione's character has already been altered from the books and bit, making her more uncaring and the connection that she shared with Harry more shallow. A short example is that Hermione only spent two summers, before obliviating her parents, away from her parents, that was 4th year and even then she was with them for a few weeks before going to grimwald place. Additionally, her and Harry were very close minus 6th year, especially after Ron abandoned them. Yet they act like it's the first time they've ever been close, which partially rubbed against the sudden romance in the wrong way.
I was really into the story until the whole semi forced drama. Hermione's character has already been altered from the books and bit, making her more uncaring and the connection that she shared with Harry more shallow. A short example is that Hermione only spent two summers, before obliviating her parents, away from her parents, that was 4th year and even then she was with them for a few weeks before going to grimwald place. Additionally, her and Harry were very close minus 6th year, especially after Ron abandoned them. Yet they act like it's the first time they've ever been close, which partially rubbed against the sudden romance in the wrong way.
6/17 c5 
1at-nightfall
I like this story even if it is a bit difficult to read for me. On the idea of a magical computer: why? I don't see any need for that. Now an interface to connect a mundane computer to magic, that would be a worthwile thing to have.
1at-nightfallI like this story even if it is a bit difficult to read for me. On the idea of a magical computer: why? I don't see any need for that. Now an interface to connect a mundane computer to magic, that would be a worthwile thing to have.
1/19 c3 csheila
Tremendous chapter
But it’s nora good idea to separate them. They will have to contend with Ginny and the Goblins
Tremendous chapter
But it’s nora good idea to separate them. They will have to contend with Ginny and the Goblins
1/19 c1 csheila
Brilliant
What a wonderful metaphor for all of us.
But he still needs to pass along Ron’s message
Brilliant
What a wonderful metaphor for all of us.
But he still needs to pass along Ron’s message
1/5 c2 2KidReapr
While chapter one, Luna’s behavior in this chapter feels very different. Chapter 1 made me believe this would be a happy story, but chapter two introduced trauma in Luna that changed the whole story type.
I want to like it, but i feel the dichotomy of the chapters costs this story its glory.
2KidReaprWhile chapter one, Luna’s behavior in this chapter feels very different. Chapter 1 made me believe this would be a happy story, but chapter two introduced trauma in Luna that changed the whole story type.
I want to like it, but i feel the dichotomy of the chapters costs this story its glory.
8/27/2023 c5 wiebenor
I have rarely seen a story with 70k words fill only 5 chapters, but what chapters they are... seriously, this story rocks!(pun intended)
This isn't usually the kind of story I like reading, because I prefer something either time travel to his younger self, or just outright taking place before Voldemort kicks the bucket permanently, but that said, this is just the right mix of a "feel good friendship" story and a "romance" story, with a little bit of awkwardness and emotional fear mixed into it, and as such it feels like it just wants to suck you up into the story, because it just breathes life into itself as time goes on.
Sure, there's no Voldemort, but I think the Wilkins getting their memories back slowly, makes them as unhinged as Voldemort but twice as deadly(I mean, you'd be out to kill too, if you'd found out you had your mind wiped badly by your only daughter) eventually they get back into touch with Hermione and eventually forgive her, but still, that's a mild overview, and I left most of it vague on purpose, so you'd almost HAVE to read the story for the whole plot...
I have rarely seen a story with 70k words fill only 5 chapters, but what chapters they are... seriously, this story rocks!(pun intended)
This isn't usually the kind of story I like reading, because I prefer something either time travel to his younger self, or just outright taking place before Voldemort kicks the bucket permanently, but that said, this is just the right mix of a "feel good friendship" story and a "romance" story, with a little bit of awkwardness and emotional fear mixed into it, and as such it feels like it just wants to suck you up into the story, because it just breathes life into itself as time goes on.
Sure, there's no Voldemort, but I think the Wilkins getting their memories back slowly, makes them as unhinged as Voldemort but twice as deadly(I mean, you'd be out to kill too, if you'd found out you had your mind wiped badly by your only daughter) eventually they get back into touch with Hermione and eventually forgive her, but still, that's a mild overview, and I left most of it vague on purpose, so you'd almost HAVE to read the story for the whole plot...
4/26/2023 c1 Nitpickerson
There are large stretches of talking heads in a void. Just paragraph after paragraph of dialogue and nothing else.
And there's no dialogue tags (", said Harry.) so it's unclear who's saying what in those stretches.
There are large stretches of talking heads in a void. Just paragraph after paragraph of dialogue and nothing else.
And there's no dialogue tags (", said Harry.) so it's unclear who's saying what in those stretches.