for He Never Smiles At Me2/9/2009 c1 Guest
Okay, after reading your story I have to say the general writing style, flow of the story and idea are actually good. I just think it could have been better because it didn't feel like House... For example, there are a few times where I thought House wouldn't say that or so on. And I had a problem with the ending because when they kiss it's like they're still in the hospital right? And so, it doesn't fit if you see what I mean. I am not trying to be mean, just work on your research a bit.
Overall, it was ok though.
Okay, after reading your story I have to say the general writing style, flow of the story and idea are actually good. I just think it could have been better because it didn't feel like House... For example, there are a few times where I thought House wouldn't say that or so on. And I had a problem with the ending because when they kiss it's like they're still in the hospital right? And so, it doesn't fit if you see what I mean. I am not trying to be mean, just work on your research a bit.
Overall, it was ok though.
1/16/2009 c1 Fire Lord Castiel
Teehee! Yay! “Well, I wanna ride in your car for once. Is that so bad?” Nice innuendo. :D
Teehee! Yay! “Well, I wanna ride in your car for once. Is that so bad?” Nice innuendo. :D
1/1/2009 c1 
207Lady Merlin
Aiie! fluff galore! very nice! I actually remember this from one of the episodes (the prank war, I mean). Nice addition!
Love,
Lady Merlin
207Lady MerlinAiie! fluff galore! very nice! I actually remember this from one of the episodes (the prank war, I mean). Nice addition!
Love,
Lady Merlin