4/24/2021 c1 Guest
Just an edgy teenager who only knows how to fuck himself nothing changing saber was not the cause of fuyuki fire and she had already disappeared before fire even started shirki is nothing different all events you write is same just you turned him into a bastard idiot who only knows how to talk like a delinquent not even summoning servant by himself just a sorry fuck
Fuck u bastard my mood was already bad after reading your story I fell like throwing up fuck yourself and grow up a little then write story you bastard

4/29/2013 c3 2obsidian-fox
The backstory for this just doesn't make sense. You're suggesting that Shirou's friendships with Rin, Shinji, etc. all started ten years ago prior to the fourth war, and that they even had an archery club for six or seven year olds? and that he can even clearly recall those relationships?

In any case, this hateful Shirou is not enjoyable to me.

9/7/2011 c12 Raj8
A truely amazing story I was hesitent to read it as I disliked the summery but this is an amazing story I hope you update it sometime as it seems to be abandoned

3/6/2011 c7 2dragoon109
from what i recall medusaa was a low lvl goddes from fayt stay night, gods where born or made from humans. so if her and the gods did destroy the humans than they would die too.

1/10/2010 c1 2ironfist456
Well I have to start that I found your story really interesting. This AU version of the Fate route was done pretty well. Of course, that might also have to do with the fact that Saber's my favorite Fate character (original, right?), so extra props for the scenes with her and Shirou.

Now while I'm not very good at critiquing I'll try my best.

To start off with there are a few inconsistences between your story and the Nasuverse, of course since this is an AU story, as long as it has a reasonable explanation behind it, it's fine. And thank goodness your story does, it's really annoying when an author changes things unexplained just because he/she doesn't like how it turned out originally. And yes, you'd be surprised how often this happens.

Your grammar is overall correct and that's saying a lot compared to many of the other half-assed Fate stories out there.

Your alternate perception of Shirou is, well to state it simply, badass. It's an intriguing concept of Kiritsugu altering his magical abilities and replacing Shirou's tracing magic with his own.

Overall this story is definitely good, if not great, as well as one of the better Fate fics on this site. So you can count my fav and subscription, and I hope you update soon. And since that's just about it...

See Ya!

11/19/2009 c7 Guest
Still liking the story very much, your Shirou is interesting.

10/5/2009 c12 4DarkJackel
Interesting work so far. I wonder what schemes Dark Sakura will enact and what she will define her goals as.

Thanks for the work.

-_-Me-_-