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6/25/2009 c3 11TwiDawnLight
O.O Birdie! -anime tears- Wh-wha happened to birdie?

-tears disappear- Now that that's out of my system...^^

Sugoi ne! I'm so glad you put up the next chapter!

I don't think I saw any typos here although these days I think my brain automatically translates them because of how many I see in some other stories XD

It was definitely exciting but I still have a question:

What happened to the birdie?

Fira: -whacks Dawn over the head with a hammer- SHUT UP ABOUT THE DAMN BIRD!

Dawn: X.X

Skye: ^.^; eh he he...Um it was a good chapter and don't mind these two; they do it all the time...

6/13/2009 c2 17EstelleDusk
Wow, this is interesting. But why would a group of Heartless attack a bird? Or from what I can tell, the raven? Is it actually a shapeshifter?
3/12/2009 c2 11TwiDawnLight
Poorly written? Ha! As if!

I like your writing style; it makes the story flow and the characters just come to life. ^^

If you really doubt it, then just take whatever concrit you get from others who read the story. No mistakes in spelling as far as I can see. Can't wait for the next one!

1/17/2009 c2 1catharsis25
First of all, stop berating yourself. The story is really good so far, and putting yourself down only irritates your readers. Second, I don't think that raven is a raven. Or that the lightning was lightning. Or, more precisely, I think the lightning was actually Thunder(if you get my drift). Can't wait for the next chapter.
1/17/2009 c1 catharsis25
Uh-huh. Standard outcast main character, check. Antagonistic school teacher, check. Uncaring school, check. Well, it seems like it's all here. Let's see what the next chapter brings.

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