for Twisting Sun6/25/2009 c3 
11TwiDawnLight
O.O Birdie! -anime tears- Wh-wha happened to birdie?
-tears disappear- Now that that's out of my system...^^
Sugoi ne! I'm so glad you put up the next chapter!
I don't think I saw any typos here although these days I think my brain automatically translates them because of how many I see in some other stories XD
It was definitely exciting but I still have a question:
What happened to the birdie?
Fira: -whacks Dawn over the head with a hammer- SHUT UP ABOUT THE DAMN BIRD!
Dawn: X.X
Skye: ^.^; eh he he...Um it was a good chapter and don't mind these two; they do it all the time...
~TwiDawnLight
11TwiDawnLightO.O Birdie! -anime tears- Wh-wha happened to birdie?
-tears disappear- Now that that's out of my system...^^
Sugoi ne! I'm so glad you put up the next chapter!
I don't think I saw any typos here although these days I think my brain automatically translates them because of how many I see in some other stories XD
It was definitely exciting but I still have a question:
What happened to the birdie?
Fira: -whacks Dawn over the head with a hammer- SHUT UP ABOUT THE DAMN BIRD!
Dawn: X.X
Skye: ^.^; eh he he...Um it was a good chapter and don't mind these two; they do it all the time...
~TwiDawnLight
6/13/2009 c2 17EstelleDusk
Wow, this is interesting. But why would a group of Heartless attack a bird? Or from what I can tell, the raven? Is it actually a shapeshifter?
17EstelleDuskWow, this is interesting. But why would a group of Heartless attack a bird? Or from what I can tell, the raven? Is it actually a shapeshifter?
3/12/2009 c2 11TwiDawnLight
Poorly written? Ha! As if!
I like your writing style; it makes the story flow and the characters just come to life. ^^
If you really doubt it, then just take whatever concrit you get from others who read the story. No mistakes in spelling as far as I can see. Can't wait for the next one!
~TwiDawnLight
11TwiDawnLightPoorly written? Ha! As if!
I like your writing style; it makes the story flow and the characters just come to life. ^^
If you really doubt it, then just take whatever concrit you get from others who read the story. No mistakes in spelling as far as I can see. Can't wait for the next one!
~TwiDawnLight
1/17/2009 c2 1catharsis25
First of all, stop berating yourself. The story is really good so far, and putting yourself down only irritates your readers. Second, I don't think that raven is a raven. Or that the lightning was lightning. Or, more precisely, I think the lightning was actually Thunder(if you get my drift). Can't wait for the next chapter.
1catharsis25First of all, stop berating yourself. The story is really good so far, and putting yourself down only irritates your readers. Second, I don't think that raven is a raven. Or that the lightning was lightning. Or, more precisely, I think the lightning was actually Thunder(if you get my drift). Can't wait for the next chapter.
1/17/2009 c1 catharsis25
Uh-huh. Standard outcast main character, check. Antagonistic school teacher, check. Uncaring school, check. Well, it seems like it's all here. Let's see what the next chapter brings.
Uh-huh. Standard outcast main character, check. Antagonistic school teacher, check. Uncaring school, check. Well, it seems like it's all here. Let's see what the next chapter brings.