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8/10/2021 c22
I would have an easier time sympathizing with Bella hurt if she didn't nearly get intimate with Jake. Granted she didn't get as far, but that's only because Bree wasn't there and her power wore off. Obviously that wasn't the case with Edward.

To be blunt Edward was a victim of rape. And I never like seeing the victims shamed for their actions under those circumstances.
8/10/2021 c20
Part of me wishes Bree surviefso you could write a sequel with her. Nonetheless, her death was very satisfying.
8/10/2021 c17
Wow, evil Bree is a top notch manipulator even apart from her powers. That was a brilliant move on her part to keep Edward on a short leash. I hate her as much as I enjoy her.
8/10/2021 c15
Its funny how nicer Jacob becomes when he imprints. He's almost a completely different person from Eclipse.

Though in all fairness even prior to imprinting I think the Jacob in this story is nicer than the one we got in Eclipse. That guy was a piece of work.
8/10/2021 c13
Carlisle is pretty cool at the end there. He almost gives a bad $$ vibe. Thats not something you see often.
8/10/2021 c12
Dang. Bree is slick. I wish this was the version we got in the books and movies. She mates for a hat able but fun villian.
8/10/2021 c8
I'm not a fan of Bella basically strining both guys along. It was bad enough in Eclipse when it was just Jacob ... but here she's doing it to Edward too. It's sad how much she's hurting both guys with her flip flopping.
5/23/2017 c23 jk
At the end of chapter 23?

Bella says "welcome home"...What a weird fucking thing to say in that moment!

and why did you have bella forgive him for cheating on her so quickly? He cheated on his MATE...ya ya I know MATES don't mean SHIT in your story. He still loved his MATE and cheated on her anyway...nice by the way...I hate you, really I hate you
5/23/2017 c22 jk
Are we talking about another ONE TIME or her sucking him off?
5/23/2017 c20 jk
Edward feels bad because he a "monster again"...why doesn't he feel bad that he allowed a fucking vampire to mess with bellas emotions...and then he fucking cheated on her for a MONTH! He cheated on his fucking mate !
5/23/2017 c14 jk
wow, I'm so fucking pissed off at chapter 14...the very first time he feels like that and its not with bella?
your so fucked up...and now I don't want bella with Edward. hes used goods now...

5/23/2017 c7 jk
WOW...Edward was already practically lusting after the girls breasts before she even knew she had a fucking I guess that answers that question...mating doesn't mean SHIT in your story.
5/23/2017 c5 jk
The end of chapter 5 fucking sucked! Edward didn't even finish!
5/23/2017 c4 jk
Soooo mating doesn't mean shit unless your a vampire? Like bella doesn't feel it? Or does mating itself mean nothing? Would Edward be able to cheat on bella?
6/9/2014 c24 twiclare
I really enjoyed the story, it was a little different! Thanks for sharing.
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